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Teenagers work while they are studying - argumentative essay


thuong_lethi 4 / 9  
Apr 23, 2010   #1
"In some countries, teenagers work while they are studying. Someone says that it is not a good idea for children, but others think it is useful for students to work part time. In my opinion, I completely agree with students' part time working. To earn money and to gain more experiences for their future jobs are prominent reasons.

It is obvious that, most students work part time to earn money may be to support their education, may be to gain a more free and satisfy life about finance. Some students whose family can not provide enough money for their school expenses really need money to compensate their study as well as to help their family. Others use the money they earn to be able to buy according to their own wish instead of depending on their parents' subsidy.

Another advantage of working part time is to support their future career especially those relate to the major they are studying. When students work, they can practice theory they learned in class. This not only helps them to remember and comprehend lesson more deeply, but also makes inspiration in studying and know exactly what is important and needs to pay much attention. On the other hand, working part time brings a lot of confidence to work, opportunities to learn about responsibility, cooperation - skills which are very necessary for working.

One can argue that students' study is affected by working part time. After working, they can feel tired and lack time to study. This may be true, but I think this can be solved if you have a suitable timetable. Once you decide to work part time, you have to arrange your timetable to balance between studying and working. For example, my English teacher works part time when he was a second-year student. He worked as a waiter in a cafeteria at night and he did not have enough time to study at home. Therefore, he paid much attention to his lesson in class and tried to learn as soon as possible. And now, he is my English teacher.

I believe that teenagers work while they are students is not bad. In contrast, this is good if you really know how to manage time best. I advise you work part time when you have a careful preparation and choose suitable jobs for your future career."

PS: I wish to receive your comment to improve my writing skill. I think my essay use so much the long sentences, and I hope you will advice me write by other structures correctly and clearly. thank you very much.
joannayl 1 / 2  
Apr 23, 2010   #2
In some countries, it is popular to have teenagers working while they are studying. Someone says believe that it is not a good idea for children , but others think thatit is useful for students can be benefit from to working part- time. In my opinion, I completely agree with I trust that student wil be benefited financially by working part-timepart time working. To earn money and to gain , as well as by gaining working more experiences for their future jobs are prominent reasons.
joannayl 1 / 2  
Apr 23, 2010   #3
It is obvious that, m One of the major reasons for students to work part- time to is earning money. may be to support their education, may be to gain a more free and satisfy life about finance. Some students whose family can not provide enough money for their school expenses really need money to compensate their study as well as to help their family. Others use the money they earn to be able to buy according to their own wish instead of depending on their parents' subsidy. Students who need to take up their families' financial responsibilities, as well as their own expenses, will have no choice, but getting a part-time job; others who lack financial support from their families, must work in order to pay off their tuitions and living expenses. On the other hand, some acquire a job simply to gain financial independence. Still some work merely just to enjoy a better lifestyle or a stronger purchasing power.
OP thuong_lethi 4 / 9  
Apr 23, 2010   #4
thank you so much! I will try correcting it.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Apr 24, 2010   #5
Some people say that it is not a good idea for children, but others ...

It is obvious that most students work part time to earn money so that it may be used to support their education, to gain more freedom, and satisfy life's financial needs.

Another advantage of working part time is to support their future career, especially those with jobs related to the major they are studying.

When students work, they can practice theory they learned in class. ---- good point!!!

For example, my English teacher worked part time when he was a second-year student. He worked ...

I believe that for teenagers to work while they are students is not bad. In contrast, this is good if you really know how to manage time best . I advise you work part time when you have a after careful preparation and choose suitable jobs for your future career.

This is very impressive. You even refuted the counter-argument!
babydoll 8 / 39  
Apr 24, 2010   #6
I think working part-time, while attending school is a good working experience. Especially in these economics times that are difficult for gaining on hands experience.

Good job on essay!


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