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television shows many foreign - made programmes harmful or not ????


elmar91 4 / 10 2  
Feb 6, 2013   #1
In many countries television shows many foreign - made programmes. The dominance of imported entertainment is harmful to the cultures of these countries.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Technology is increasing significantly day by day and everyday new things are invented. One of the most important inventions of 20th century is Television and it added a new dimension to our lives. It was the biggest invention that added new vistas in telecommunication field. Today TV and its show programs such as foreign - made programs play the main role in our country and it has many disadvantages of forming our culture or society because of that it is the one of the most used invention that is used in every place.

Nowadays millions of people have TV sets in their home and they get some information from all over the world. Each country has its own TV show programs, but in many countries there are many foreign - programs that are showing in channels. For example: In my country there is a show name is ``who wants to marry? `` is one of the other country`s program and most of the people especially old, unemployed, young girls who are not married and housewives watch this show very curiously, because first they are unemployed and second it is interesting for them who married , fight or get divorced with someone. But they do not know or understand that it is dangerous for them. These shows take the control of people mind and play with them how they want. On the other hand foreign countries people also watch this programs and they start to think about our cultures or traditions what they see on TV.

Even though TV programs also affect our young society, because of that they spend most of their daylight time watching TV and become under the influence of this shows. For example: There is a show called ``Cage`` in our TV`s channel. They took this program from Russian channel. In this show boys and girls come together and live in a house for several months. They did not go outside only stay in this house, fight or say incentive words each other and do some sexual behaviors. And our young children watch and be impacted from this shows, after that they are getting to form like what characters they see in TV programs.

As a conclusion television foreign - made programs have many disadvantages and for this government must not broadcast any such programs on TV channels if they are harmful for our society or culture. If you want your children to be a good member of our society you must take the control of your children.

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 7, 2013   #2
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Each country has its own TV show programs, but in many countries there are many foreign - programs that are showing in channels. For example:

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