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Tell about the weather which you hate


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Mar 8, 2020   #1

walking in the drizzle



When it is drizzle, I feel uncomfortable. I hate it because it usually lasts and makes a lot of inconvenient. The long days of drizzle make road dirty and muddy, which it's difficult to move. Moreover, clothes can't dry, always humid and have uneasy smell.

Holt [Contributor] - / 9,531 2963  
Mar 9, 2020   #2
The weather you are describing is not a drizzle, it is raining. So you should say "When it is raining". Raining is defined as the act of water falling from the skies or rainfall. When you claim that the rain creates inconvenience (correction for inconvenient), you should mention what kind of inconvenience it gives you. That type of statement calls for a justification or evidence of inconvenience. You have to explain it thoroughly to the reader otherwise the reader is wondering how you are inconvenienced by the rain. The road yo are describing does not justify a personal inconvenience. Deliver an example of why it is difficult for you to move during rainy conditions. "Long days of rain" not drizzle. Drizzle is a light rain that only last a few minutes. Rain lasts an hour or more. The last sentence does not explain why your clothes cannot dry. It is because the rain does not allow you to hang your clothes under the sun? Your essay needs more examples and explanations for it to make sense to the reader.


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