In the past, peopl e who live in small community society are peacefull. But, today they are move to the cities and become selfish and not interact with the others.
There is a benefit living in small community. We can learn how to share from the good neighborhood . Just like any others there are many of them like to share foods or experiences. For example the community can make somekind of festival that we can tightened the relation between us. As a result we can live peacefully without any problems. Therefore, make a good relation with them can gain their sympathy so we can ask for help to them anytime.
However, there is a drawback. There is they could not get appropriate formal education because almost all people have to work in farm or field. In many case villagers mostly are farmers. For example a few number of formal schools make it harder for them to get a good education from educated teachers. As a result their track record for some subject are lower than people that lives in the cities. Therefore, proper education is one of the hardest thing to found in small community.
In conclusion, disadvantages and advantages living in a small community are the people viewpoints to get a better quality of life.
Hi zakita, it is my first time to correct essay in essayforum. Actually, I still learn about it, but i will try to give you a writting feedback :)
Is it writting task 2 for ielts test? if yes, you have to write it at least 250 words, because your words just 217. In first paragraph, i think it will be better if you give more explanation like a transition setence before go to second paragraph. At the last paragraph (conclusion) you may can pharaprase it, so it will be little bit longer
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However, there is a drawback => On the other hand, living in village has a drawback
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Thank you and i hope my sugestion will help you. Fighting! :)
In the past, peopl epeople who live in small community ...
For example, a few number of formal schools ...
As a result, their track record for some subject ...
zaki please carefull with your sentences, don't forget about putting commas
In the past, peopl e who live in small community society are peacefullthe majority of extraordinary commune spent all of their lives in small villages . They lived with suitable social life where knew each others . But, today they are ...
There are the merits and demerits of living in a small village and further in this case.
