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What do you think is the biggest environmental problems in VN? How can you solve the problem?


cookie234 5 / 10 3  
Jan 6, 2016   #1
Here is one of my speaking topics in my country. Help me with it. Thank you so much ^^
Vietnam is on its way to become an industrial country, therefore, there will be unavoidably negative effects on the environment, especially water pollution, which is the biggest environmental pollution in our country.

Water pollution is any chemical, biological or physical change in quatity that does harm to living organisms or desired uses. Although the gorvenment has applied the policy about protecting the environment, water pollution keeps rising considerably. One direct cause is the industrial company. They discharge toxic chemicals or raw sewage directly into the sea without regulation. For example, in Bac Ninh province, there are a large amount of untreatable garbage, which leads to the pollution in water supply. Another cause of this matter is the backward living standard in the suburban areas. All the rubbish is not treated and thrown into the water. In this way the environment pollution will become more and more serious.

Therefore the government and population should work together to protect the environment in the most effective way. To begin with people's attitude, they have to learn the importance of water to their life and do something the simplest methods to protect the environment by reducing water use or unnecessary wastage. People should also put efforts in planting trees and collecting all litters in their areas. While going to seas, rivers or lakes, taking the precaution of not throwing waste into them is also important. By these ways with the participation of the whole society whether or not the current situation of our environment is seriously negative, we can still keep the water environment friendly.

The main conclusion can be drawn from this discussion is that we learned the importance the water bring to us, therefore one individual has to be aware of it and determined to fight against the pollution.

kerry2654 13 / 37 12  
Jan 6, 2016   #2
Vietnam is on its way to becoming an industrial country; therefore, there will be negative effects on the environment, specifically water pollution which is our largest environmental problem.

Water pollution is any chemical, biological, or physical change in quantity that harms living organisms or desired uses (what do you mean by this?). Although our government has applied an environmental protection policy, water pollution keeps rising considerably. One direct cause is the industrial company (which? you mean industry but industrial industry would sound weird). They discharge toxic chemicals or raw sewage directly into the sea without regulation. For example, in Bac Ninh province, there are large amounts of untreatable (untreatable?) garbage, which leads to the pollution in water supply. Another cause of this matter is the backward living standard in the suburban areas. All the rubbish is not treated and thrown into the water. In this way the environment pollution will increase in severity.

Therefore the government and population should work together to protect the environment in the most effective way. To begin with people's attitude, they have to learn the importance of water in their life and simple methods to reduce water use and unnecessary wastage. The general public should also put efforts in planting trees and collecting all litters in their areas. While going to seas, rivers, or lakes, taking the precaution of not throwing waste into them is also important. By these ways with the participation of the whole society, whether or not the current situation of our environment is seriously negative, we can still keep the water environment friendly.

The main conclusion can be drawn from this discussion is that we learned the importance the water bring to us, therefore one individual has to be aware of it and determined to fight against the pollution.

I liked it but you should be clearer in your statements.
bottles 3 / 16  
Jan 6, 2016   #3
hi, this is my first post on this forum. these are some suggestions from my side, and they may not always right because i am also bad at writing.

"the government and population should work together to protect the environment in the most effective way."

population usually means how many people, so it is more reasonable to use "citizens" here?

"While going to seas, rivers or lakes... By these ways with the participation of ..."

these two sentences make me feel strange.

Thanks
vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 7, 2016   #4
Linh, the essay that you present as a discussion of your country's problem is weak and does not really offer a solid, believable, and implementable solution to the problem. Instead of explaining the kinds of environmental pollution problems the country faces, you should instead make reference to the industrial problems brought about by the improving economy of Vietnam. keep in mind that the pollution problems are gernally the same in every nation and the difference only lies in the way each country approaches a solution to the problem.

Your solutions concentrate mainly on changing the mindset of the people in order to change their attitude about pollution. All of your solutions are placed solely on the shoulders of the citizens of the nation. As you are most likely aware, the government should be the focal point of the solutions because it is only the government that can compel people to change their minds and attitudes regarding causing pollution in the country. Only government laws can prevent industrial pollution, and only the government can punish the offenders. Therefore, equal responsibility should be placed, and discussed within the essay for the people and government roles in solving the problem.

Keeping that aspect of the discussion in mind, it is obvious that your solutions and conclusion presented doesn't really deal with the complete issue of pollution in Vietnam. Therefore, the essay can do with some major revision through additional content and discussions.
OP cookie234 5 / 10 3  
Jan 7, 2016   #5
Thank you so much. I know that I am really bad at writing essays.My presents are always weak. But I will try my best to do.
pertiwi02 11 / 8 4  
Jan 7, 2016   #6
Hi, cookie :)
Therefore,(PUT COMMA) the government and population should work together to protect the environment in the most effective way.

Remember, if you use common transition words such as
Showing contrast :
However,
On the other hand,
In contrast,


Showing a result :
Therefore,
As a result,
Consequently,
Thus,

Don't forget to put a comma

Enjoy your writing :)


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