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Some think newspapers are the best method for reading the news



Tuantienti 1 / -  
Sep 25, 2024   #1
Some individuals believe that reading the news could be best achieved by the use of newspapers. In contrast, others argue that other media could bring about better experiences. Although both schools of thought hold merit, I agree more with the latter perspective.
On the one hand, there is one reason why newspapers are perceived as the best approach to expose to daily news. In the past, individuals often stayed updated about global news and current affairs by purchasing newspapers. In modern days, these physical pieces of paper have been the means of media that is passed down through generations, making it highly accessible and straightforward to a broad demographic. However, this approach often required both costs and time, making this approach seemingly outdated in our current era.
On the other hand, there are several reasons why other media should be prioritized over newspaper. In fact, thanks to the rapid advancement of digital era, the emergence of modern technology is an inevitable outcome. Specifically, the advent of smartphones and other electronic devices have allowed individuals to access the internet quickly, where a wealth of information is available and rapidly updated on a regular basis without charges involved. Therefore, these factors can reinforce a belief that our current media can be more effective than newspaper as it is more time-efficient and cost-efficient.
In conclusion, while there are mixed opinions on determining whether using newspapers or other media for exposing to news is more effective, I believe priority should be taken for modern media. While newspapers could be highly accessible and user-friendly for all age groups, this means is characterized as out-of-date given the appearance of modern devices, allowing users to quickly access free information.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15224  
Sep 25, 2024   #2
I am afraid that your topic restatement / paraphrasing is not good enough. It is practically a cut and paste version of the original, with very little to no significant changes in the restructuring of the presentation to make it appear that you are presenting your understanding of the topic. This will cause an automatic failure of your preliminary Task Accuracy score since you are expected to restate the original topic in a new totally different wording from the original. When we include the lack of a proper thesis statement to support your writer's opinion, the pre-scoring considerations for your essay fall within the failing mark which will affect its ability to receive a base passing score.

The sudden presentation of the writer's personal opinion in the concluding summary section of the essay further indicates that the essay will receive a failing final score. That is because the concluding summary cannot contain the writer's opinion since it is meant to only provide a reverse paraphrase of the topic plus reasoning paragraphs. The writer's opinion must be presented either as a stand alone 3rd paragraph or, as a reference point within the 2 reasoning paragraphs. One personal opinion for each public representation.
Lapis 2 / 2  
Oct 3, 2024   #3
I'm supposed that although your passage is enough permissible word, but it's still lacking something. You should put some examples or facts into your essay to support your point
Helen335 3 / 7  
1 day ago   #4
In the sentence 'In conclusion, while there are mixed opinions on determining whether using newspapers or other media for exposing to news is more effective,' consider rephrasing to 'whether using newspapers or other media to access news is more effective.' This change improves clarity and flow. Additionally, in the phrase 'this means is characterized as out-of-date,' it would be clearer to say 'this medium is considered outdated.


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