There is an urgent problem
Avoid exaggerations in the prompt restatement. This paragraph in particular must be as true to the original presentation as possible. That means, overstatements such as the phrase above must be avoided. Doing so changes the original basis of the presentation and adds a personal insight too soon in the paragraph. The phrase could have been more effectively added as a part of your opinion and thesis statement since it is the writer (you) that sees the situation as an "urgent problem". That was never implied in the original presentation. Good work on your opinion and thesis presentation though. It really answered the questions relevantly and on the mark.
The first reasoning paragraph was off to a good start, but failed to connect the bad diet of progressive countries with the results of their sedentary lifestyle. Just using connected transition words is not enough to score well in a task 2 essay. The transition word must also help create a cohesive paragraph using the presented discussion points. What connects the diet with the lifestyle? Use that as an additional transition method.
In return,
Wrong word usage and reference. Since you are looking at the results of the government investment in healthcare, the correct phrase is "As a result", meaning the final product of their current investment in the field. More English word familiarity is required on your end.
lots and lots
Too informal a phrase to use in a formal written discussion. It makes the paper sound very elementary and unprofessional. Avoid such references when writing this type of paper.
Another effect
Use transitional sentences rather than transition words that do not help keep the cohesiveness of the discussion in the paragraphs. For example:
As the health budget contnues to result in higher government expenses, the desired solutions result in employment problems instead.Always keep the connection between reason 1 and reason 2 in the same paragraph. It is necessary to meet C+C requirements.
The concluding summary is good but not properly formatted. What the examiner will be looking for are a minimum of 2 sentences that properly represent the short form of the previous discussion. It should contain:
1. The topic restatement
2. Your response to the first question
3. Combined reasons (without explanations)
These must be presented using at least 40 words in the last paragraph presentation.
Not a bad first effort. There is definitely room for improvement using the tips above. As for the score this might achieve, you have to contact me privately for detailed scoring services.