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Three goods exported from Someland in the past, and the future measured in billion dollars.


ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Sep 27, 2016   #1
The chart below gives information about Someland's main exports in 2005, 2015, and future projections for 2025.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.


The bar chart shows three goods exported from Someland in the past, and the future measured in billion dollars.
As seen, export for dairy products dominated Someland's export in 2015. This is projected to be overtaken by International tourism which will outnumber in 10 years later.

Almost 5 billion US dollars of dairy products were exported from Someland in the initial year. In the following year, this figure reached a peak at nearly 8 billion dollars which meant that is experiences the most significant increase among others by virtually 3 billion dollars although this is predicted to decrease slightly for over 7 billion dollars in 2015.

Another noticeable export over 3 different years is international tourism which presents an upward trend begun with over 6 billion dollars. This sector will become the highest number of Someland's exports in the former year which rises by 2 billion dollars during period given by the graph. Meanwhile, export of meat products will decline rapidly from 4 billion dollars to just under 3 billion dollars in the future projections.

(175 words)



akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Sep 27, 2016   #2
Hi Eka..
In this time, I focus on your contents solely. Actually, this is a good job, but I wanna give you a few suggestions to enhance your score.


dominated Someland's export in 2015

I feel there is an odd situation. That is an overview, but you describe the period detailed. Following that, why you only mentioned the condition in 2015 whereas meat products also dominated in 2005. You should find the other general situation. It can be represented like this

ALL COMMODITIES EXPORTED TO OTHER COUNTRIES HAVE INCREASED SIGNIFICANTLY. HOWEVER, THERE IS AN ODD CIRCUMSTANCE WHERE A SECTOR OF INTERNATIONAL TOURISM IN A PROJECTION IS GOING TO SHOW A SMALL DECLINE.

lmost 5 billion US dollars of dairy products were exported from Someland in the initial year. In the following year, this figure reached a peak

I remember that I ever told you about the prompt of the writing task1. In this matter, your job is to compare the figures relevant. You cannot describe them separately. Turning to the first body paragraph, it is clear that you only review about one figure. That seemed that you play safely. It doesn't matter if you do that, However, you cannot reach the score more than 6.

I hope these can help you. You should review my notes and make it alarm for you when you write task 1. My point is that you have to have a bravery to compare.

Keep Fighting..
GOOD LUCK
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