is indeed reducing
There is no need for you to affirm the statement. It is not part of the discussion instruction. You will recieve a deduction due to topic alteration. The willis personal opinion should not be included in a restatement presentation.
While it is necessary ... and their health.
This sentence will not recieve any score as it does not respond to the discussion qquestion and instructions. Restating the instructions is not considered part of the task requirements. However, question responses and a discussion outline is scored as a part of the task.
The age gap is getting bigger
How does this relate to the topic? The connecting example is missing, rendering the paragraph incomplete in tums of discussion requirements.
Your summary conclusion fails to meet the minimum 40 word requirement. 2 sentence presentations are expected. This is another markdown.