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Time : Rainbow cake mountains show stunning slices of colour


kobayakawa07 8 / 13  
Aug 12, 2016   #1
Time : Rainbow cake mountains show stunning slices of colour
By Emily Benson

Breaktaking parts of colour are seen in rainbow mountains

There is an alien-like phenomena in China's Zhangye Danxia Landform Geological Park. Such phenomena, which is located in Gansu Province, is colourful mountain that consists of many parts of colour. Since of such a fact, society often call it as rainbow mountains.

Such a view occurred since water and oxygen contacting with iron, minerals, and others element that writhe from sediment. In the past, sediment transformed into rock. Then, tectonic forces made rock moved and formed unique structure as we saw today. Such forces are same as forces that used to make Himalayas Structure. With erosion from water and wind, the relief of rock had been changed as we see today.

reference : time.com

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 13, 2016   #2
Hi Mahdi..
I have read your writing closely. In my vantage point, you need to improve your English more and more.
I hope you can follow these instructions.


There is an alien-like phenomena PHENOMENON (YOU SHOULD BE CAREFUL TO DISTINGUISH BETWEEN SINGULAR AND PLURAL) in China's Zhangye Danxia Landform Geological Park. Such phenomena, which is THE PHENOMENON located in Gansu Province, is colourful A MAJESTIC mountain that consists of many parts of colour. Since of such a fact IN FACT, society often callS it as THE rainbow mountains.

Such a view occurred since water and oxygen contacting with iron, minerals, and others ...
In the past, THE sediment transformed into rock. Then FOLLOWING THAT, tectonic forces made rock moved and formed A unique structure as we saw LIKE today. Such THE forces are same as ...

Note:
1. You should check your words in The Dictionary whether SINGULAR OR PLURAL
2. Pay attention to THE VERB AGREEMENT
3. Use of article.
4. You should harness transitive words appropriately.

Practice more and more, You will show better progress.


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