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TOELF TOPIC:big party including lots of people VS small party including close friends


sherry manson 2 / 4 1  
Jul 4, 2013   #1
Topic: to celebrate some major events like a graduation or birthday, inviting a lot of people is better than inviting some close friends or family members to hold a small party

When it comes to birthday, graduation, adult ceremony, people usually hold some parties to celebrate. Considering expenses and labor as well as time factors, some people may choose to hold a small-scale party which only includes close friends and relatives. As for me, I would like to hold a big party, inviting friends, family members and related ones to raise the atmosphere, train our abilities and acquaint more friends.

To begin with, the process of preparing a big party is far more meaningful than hold a rough and ready small party. Before the party, the host need to consider a lot elaborately such as age appropriation, location, how many to invite, decoration, beverage and food. People who plot the party should take part in every stage to set up a party: prior planning need to take all the possible situation into account and then order or purchase the goods as well as ask for intimate friends or family to help. Through these preparations, we can learn a careful and comprehensive thinking habit and train our capabilities to communicate and make radical purchase decision. Like once I held a big birthday party and invited a lot of people. All the preparations were ok, but I forgot ice for beverage and 50 people were a little out of hand. After that time, I know how to manage big party and what factors should be pay attention.

No one will deny that parties are great opportunities to develop relationship among people. Since you invite a lot of related people, your friends may bring their friends so you will have an unsurpassed chance to acquaint new friends in a pleasant ambience and talk to them with a smile face. Sometimes great luck will fall on you if you meet some special people. My aunt held a big party when she finished her high school and invited her friends and told them that they can bring their own friends or relatives. In the party, my aunt felt like she can talk to a person who is a friend of my aunt's friends. Then she surprisedly found out that person is the admission office director of the university she applied and the man thought she was insightful and talented. So she got in her dream university. You can never predict what kind of people you may meet in different occasions.

Moreover, the main goal to hold a party is sharing and conveying pleasure. A big party can generate a boisterous ambience readily and make sure everybody there during a happy and relaxing time. The more people come, the more activities can be held. Then much more laughter would come out of these people and make the party stimulating and attractive. Small party can be held cheaper and easier but cheerless sometimes even humdrum.

In a nutshell, considering that big parties can enhance our capabilities and meet new friends as well as raise a enthusiastic atmosphere, inviting more people to organize a big party is better than hold a small one.

Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jul 4, 2013   #2
When it comes to birthday, graduation, adult ceremony, people usually hold some parties to celebrate.

People generally love to celebrate the events like birthdays, graduation, adult ceremony etc. The most common way of celebrating such events is hosting parties.

As for me, I would like to hold a big party, inviting friends, family members and related ones to raise the atmosphere, train our abilities and acquaint more friends.

As for me, I would like to hold a big party with lots of friends, both immediate and extended family members in order to keep the party spirit high, form new friends, and network well with others.
shadman19922 21 / 74 10  
Jul 4, 2013   #3
I won't comment on grammar since there aren't that many grammatical problems. But what I will comment on is the content of your essay. Let's discuss your first point, which discusses the how bigger parties develop your management skills: How does the development of such a skill relate to the celebration of the event itself? What you did was merely mention how a big event contributes to the build-up and improvement of a skill but did not mention how it bigger parties are more suitable to the celebration of the event itself.

The second paragraph does provide a strong point that one gets to meet new people and fortuitously someone really helpful. But the issue again is the lack of development for this point.

I am guessing you're new to this, try reading a lot (Avoid fiction though, it doesn't help you build developing points) and full scoring sample essays. They help a lot.
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jul 4, 2013   #4
To begin with, the process of preparing a big party is far more meaningful than holding a rough and ready small party.

Before the party, the host needs to consider a lot elaboratelymany things such as age appropriation, location, how many to invite, decoration, beverage and food.

... don't use phrases if you are not confident ....

People who plotorganize the party should take part in every stage to set up a party

.... the latter part does not add any value to this sentence.
Seems you need to improve on vocabulary. Don't use words if you are not familiar with their usage.
ningo 22 / 53 9  
Jul 4, 2013   #5
big party

a big party

to hold a big party, inviting friends

... invite friend
Your last 3 paras are good writings but the first para is not really attractive. Try to make it become better! :D
Fardin 6 / 14  
Jul 5, 2013   #6
Like once I held a big birthday party and invited a lot of people. All the preparations were ok, but I forgot ice for beverage and 50 people were a little out of hand

hi dear nice essay .but i cant understand this point? what does it means?
Fardin 6 / 14  
Jul 17, 2013   #7
In a nutshell,

hi dear
it is very interesting for me, i have never seen it before!!!! are you sure using this phrase in essay is true ???
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 18, 2013   #8
When it comes to birthday, graduation, adult ceremony, people usually hold some parties to celebrate

... The way this idea is expressed does not provide your essay a catchy start. Express it more direct;
People celebrate various events of life such as birthday, graduation, attaining age etc. by hosting grand parties to share the happy moments with their friends and relatives.

As for me, I would like to hold a big party, inviting friends, family members and related ones to raise the atmosphere, train our abilities and acquaint more friends.

... you better align this sentence more with the prompt;
For me, I would prefer to hold a bigger party inviting all my friends and relatives in order to create more interactive sessions with friends and relatives.
nazgol 1 / 5  
Jul 19, 2013   #9
hi
1-I think it is better to rewrite the essay in 4 paragraph
2- for an argumentative essay just paragraph 2 and 3 are about advantage or disadvantages of each topics and it's better to bring major facts and reasons not examples!

3-first and ending paragraphs should be in similar length around 40-45 words


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