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Topic: People struggle with new things in their life


Dongba2004 1 / -  
Feb 8, 2022   #1

people often find it difficult to adapt to new situations in their life



In the developed era, people usually have to deal with surprise changes that are completely different from life ordinary. However, most people feel confused, and it's hard to tackle those. There are several reasons to explain these phenomenons that will be given in this essay and include suggestions.

To commend with, a clear cause is people do not have enough knowledge and experience to handle new anything in their life. They are not trained to use basic skills in all situations, therefore they lack confidence, even afraid and they maintain ordinary status in their life. For example, a lot of surveys gave evidence to prove that people with a poor level of education are often not capable of creating a breakthrough in study or work. What is more, new situations bring many challenges. They must cope with the astonishing shift that they do not know or think about before. Hence, they are not able to solve those according to the best ways.

For the reasons mentioned above, some keys will suggest addressed. First of all, people should take part in training courses about communication skills, solving-problem skills, and so on to expand knowledge and experience. Besides, it is necessary for students to learn minor subjects in school because surely it will support their knowledge in the future. Another measure is that people should prepare for situations which are capable of happening in the future to ready deal with them anywhen. For instance, Covid-19 is more and more dangerous and threat humans so the government was curbing restaurants that did not open, however, they solve this situation by shipping food to where customers requested.

In conclusion, the appearance of new circumstances is inevitable in life, so people should employ them to improve and create exceptional situations on their own instead of escaping and being afraid of them because it will make people's lives boring.

I want to receive feedbacks about my grammar and the way use vocab in each situations
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,766 4768  
Feb 9, 2022   #2
The exam taker shows a clear grammar range and accuracy problem in the first paragraph. He has almost no control over the way the sentences are structured. The information presented in each paragraph is confusing, lacking in sense, and definitely, do not meet the coherence and cohesiveness requirements of the task. While the writer has done his best to express his thoughts in English, the word usage is more akin to that of someone who used an AI X language to English translator. If this is the English writing ability of the author, then he is not prepared to take and pass the IELTS test. His English language expertise is that of a beginner. He is incapable of making himself properly understood in English.

The writer does not have a clear target for each of his discussion topics, making it more difficult to create a connection between the original topic and the writer's discussion / opinion presentation. Truth be told, this is more of a personal experience discussion that would have benefited say, if the writer had discussed a situation where he had to struggle with a particulat adjustment. An example of this would have been his adjustment to online classes from in-person classes during the pandemic or, how he dealt with the lockdown and lack of social interaction during the lockdown period. Both are the most recent, sudden changes that we all experienced differently, and would have made perfect reasons and solutions discussions for this essay.

The writer may be able to control his sentence structures in the future provided he learns to focus his writing based on the prompt requirements. Rather than trying to give a general discussion, using personal experiences are always best. The examiners tend to score these references higher than usual because it shows a personal understanding of the discussion through relevant examples.


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