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IELTS topic. There will be soon no role for teachers in classrooms.


y0_3mma 19 / 28 6  
Apr 17, 2012   #1
As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom. Agree or disagree.
Please correct and rate my essay. Thanks!

In recent years it has become more common for teachers to use technological tools in the learning process. However, I do not agree that this explosion in technology will 'innovate' the education system, by replacing teachers with computers. 38

There are several reasons why teachers will never be replaced by computers. Firstly, computers need to be operated by people. No one can argue that technological tools are must-haves for the classroom of today. For example, lessons are more attractive and easier to understand when they are put on a Power Point presentation and then presented with a LCD Projector. However, scientists prove that every classroom needs trained staff to use these interactive and innovative ways of teaching. I agree that nowadays the learning process benefits greatly from computers, but they are just tools for teachers and they cannot work properly without human's touch. 105

Secondly, children need human interactions. No matter how advanced technology will be, it is clear that a computer will never be able to communicate with its pupils. As a recent interview with Josh Trumm - the founder of the 'Teachers Global Group'- reveals, human interactions will never be imitated by computers: 'This verbal and non-verbal communication between teachers and children is the first step towards a proper education. Without someone who can explain and understand their problems, pupils cannot actually learn'. I am inclined to agree with this scientific view, because only a teacher can feel and connect with pupils, be a friend and a model. 103

In conclusion, there can be no school without a teacher. I think that computers will continue to be used by teachers in the learning process, but they will never take their place. Teachers are not just teachers, they are also friends and conseilieurs. 43

tuongvi 3 / 6  
Apr 17, 2012   #2
However, scientists prove proved that
In recent years, [hr teachers use the technological tools in the learning process commonly
Firstly, computers need to be operated by people
tinie 4 / 9  
Apr 17, 2012   #3
I feel the teachers are still needed in learning to be more effective. teacher is the facilitator the most easy to use.
alirulez 3 / 21  
Apr 18, 2012   #4
Hi,

I think this one is the best out of all your essays. Still I think some of the word choices could have been better.

No one can argue that technological tools are must-haves for the classroom of today -- This sentence is unclear. I would have written
It is widely accepted that technological equipments(i am using equipment, because tools had already been used in the intro para) are imperative in today's classrooms.

For example, lessons arebecomes more attractive and easier to understand when they are put on a Power Point presentation and then presented with a LCD Projector.-- this sentence is beautifully written.

However, scientists prove that every classroom needs trained staff to use these interactive and innovative ways of teaching. -- I think this one is quite exaggerated. Scientist does not have any role to play over here. You could have made it simple.

However, scientists proveit is no secret that every classroom needs trained staff to use these interactive and innovative ways of teaching.

Hope it helps you. Good Luck
xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 18, 2012   #5
Hi Luca,

here is my attempt to this topic. 15A. The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students will no exist in 2050, to what extent do you agree or disagree?

With the development of technology in recent decades, there has been a growing trend that distance-learning is getting more popular ever than before. Therefore, many start to believe that the face-to-face classroom teaching style will disappear in another 50 years. In fact, this is not the case in many real life situations.

Admittedly, the web-based learning modus has some benefits. One is that it saves students a vast deal of time and avoids daily travel to and from school. Under this circumstance, they could obtain sufficient time to study their course materials and complete the assignment through the Internet without delay. Secondly, the online study offers the flexible schedule for people who have a full-time job. Unlike the younger students, daily commuters are unable to attend classes due to a regular working schedule. Instead, they could achieve their studies through the online facilities such as library database and discussion forum at any time which is more convenient for them.

However, the in-class teaching form brings several merits to children which are irreplaceable. Firstly, it provides the cooperative learning opportunities among students. For instance, a group activity encourages all team members to share their ideas and learn from others in order to achieve a common goal. Besides, from a direct group interaction, young children are able to obtain the problem-solving and negotiation skills which play a crucial role in their future career life. Moreover, teachers are capable of obtaining more opportunities to provide a wide range of supports to the learners in a class setting. In this case, children could receive immediate feedback of their questions and correct their mistakes promptly.

In conclusion, it is convincing the online study has some advantages. However, the live teaching form is indispensable for younger ones to develop valuable social and communicational skills as well as receive the supports during their studies.
OP y0_3mma 19 / 28 6  
Apr 19, 2012   #6
thak you, Ali, I really appreciate your comment.

Wang, I like your essay and you have nice vocabulary. be careful, you have some minor gramatical errors.
xyx0905 16 / 49  
Apr 19, 2012   #7
Hi Luca Emma,

That's why I am here for. I have serious grammatical errors couple of months ago. Now I try to improve by comprehensive practice. I can't avoid all of them by one attempt, but try to remember some common mistakes and make sure not doing them again.

Cheers


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