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IELTS Task 1: Total school spending in the UK


andial 21 / 48 3  
May 11, 2014   #1
Folks kindly need your input. It is counting days before taking IELTS test :-)
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The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991, and 2001

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The three pie charts provide informatian concerning the alteration of annual spending by one school in Great Britain in 1981, 1991, and 2001.

Overall, while most categories experienced a considerable fluctuation during the period under review, some others faced either increase or decrease..

As per the data, excluding 'furniture and equipment' and 'other workers' salaries' which were saw a slight decrease, others experienced an increase from 1981 to 1991. Resources, books for instance, and insurance were the most marked categories in this occasion. It was led by their 30% increases from their previous proportions which were 15% and 1% respectively.

Turning to the next decade, the increasing trend of 'insurance' and 'furniture and equipment' continued up to more than 100 % and almost threefold respectively. Both categories were the most marked in this case. Interestingly, although teachers' salaries decreased slighlty from 50% to 45%,andtwo other categories, resources and other workers' salaries, saw the same thing, teacher salaries, however, still stood at the highest respect in this focused period.




dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
May 11, 2014   #2
Overall, while most categories experienced a considerable fluctuation during the period under review, some others faced either increase or decrease..

I feel you can present more meaningful and obvious trends in this overview as these seem to be too general and nothing more specific about these graphs. This is what I suggest for the Overview;

Overall, the teacher's salaries had been the highest while insurance been the least expenditure in all three years.
Pahan 1 / 1,908 553  
May 11, 2014   #3
Yes, dumi is right. The overview must present more relevant info about the graphs.
OP andial 21 / 48 3  
May 11, 2014   #4
Dumi, thanks for your suggestion for my overview. Is there any odd in body paras?
dumi 1 / 6,930 1592  
May 12, 2014   #5
... Ok, let's see :)

As per the data, excluding 'furniture and equipment' and 'other workers' salaries' which were saw a slight decrease, others experienced an increase from 1981 to 1991

Well, you need to support this trend with more details. That is what they expect you to do in your detail paras. Every general trend you state their should be supported by more details and data.

This is what I suggest;
The data shows that "furniture and equipment" and "other workers' salaries" experienced some decline by 10% and 4% respectively from 1981 to 1991.


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