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Total School Spending in the United Kingdom during three separate decades

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Feb 7, 2017   #1

analysis of the pie charts - Ielts task

The pie charts described the percentage of school spending in the United Kingdom during 3 separate decades: 1981, 1991, and 2001. Teacher's salaries dominate expenditure of schools spending and Insurance always be a small part of every decade.

Percentage of teacher's salaries increased to a half of total spending in 1991 and has descended to 45% in 2001. Furniture and equipment fell dramatically from 15% to 5% and rose extremely in the amount of 18% for next ten years. Resources spent 15% of total budget, became to one-fifth on UK school budget in 1991, and descended just to 9% in 2001. Other workers' salaries continue to decline from 28% to 22% or almost one-fifth part of total expenditures, and the last became 15%. In contrast to other workers'salaries, insurance has increased every decade, although it is not very significant. It began from 2%, rose 1%, and became 8% or almost one-tenth in 2001.

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Feb 7, 2017   #2
Anabel, this essay still contains the same paragraph problem your previous essay had. Please try to write more than 153 words in order to improve your lexical resource,cohesiveness and cohere, and task accuracy score. The mechanical nature of your writing is fast becoming a problem for you. You need to actually spend time reviewing the chart and discovering the best way to present it. Divide the 20 minutes into 2. 10 minutes to review the information and 10 minutes to write your report. That way you truly get to analyze the information provided and allow yourself enough time to develop an essay that can best reflect your understanding of the information. For instance, did you even notice that the best way to write this essay was to write a comparison of the years involved covering the same items of expenditure? That would show a clear analysis of the information and would allow you to develop a better and more interesting presentation for the information. Try to make the presentation a bit more interesting and creative. Go beyond just what the information before you is. Think of how you can deliver the information in a more interesting , engaging, and informative manner.
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Feb 7, 2017   #3
Hey Anabel.

Time distribution is very important. Firstly read up on the entire material given and then focus on your writing.
Once you have an idea on what to write, spend some time to make it sound more interesting. There should always be something that makes your essay stand out!

Even though you've summarized most of the information, it is very monotonous.

"For Example - The pie charts given above denote the variations in the expenditure pattern of a single school in the United Kingdom over the last 2 decades.

Most parameters have changed over this period.
The majority of the money is spent on teacher's salaries. It was 40% in 1981, which subsequently spiked to 50% in 1991 before finally reaching 45% in 2001. "

Use Synonyms where ever possible.
Good Luck :)

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