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IELTS TASK 1 - Total UK School Spendings!


JasS 10 / 30  
Mar 18, 2014   #1
The charts compare the allotments of school expenditure in the UK in three definite years (1981, 1991 and 2001)

It is clear that the workers' salaries were the major expenses, while the smallest percentage of school budget spent to insurance in each year.

Looking at the graphs more details, there was a slight increase in teachers' salaries, from 40% to half between 1981 and 1991. Meantime, the salaries of other workers declined from less than a quarter to just over a fifth. However, in 2001, teachers were paid 45% of total budget, while 15% of money expended to other workers.

By contrast, the total school spending on resources and furniture in 1981 were 15%. The former increased to 20% in 1991 and had decreased rapidly to 9% by 2001, while the letter was 23% of total school spending in 2001. However, the insurance of school spending had not changed almost over the 10 years, but it was 8% in 2001.




MisterWandering 18 / 321 130  
Mar 18, 2014   #2
three definite years

three years/three separate years

the smallest percentage of school budget spent to

was spent on

Looking at the graphs more details

This part is unnecessary

expended

were expended

were 15%

were 15% each.

while the letter was 23% of total school spending in 2001

while the latter made up 23% of total school spending in 2001

the insurance of school spending had not changed almost over the 10 years, but it was 8% in 2001.

the proportion of insurance expenditure remained stable for the first ten years prior to rising to 8% in 2001.
OP JasS 10 / 30  
Mar 18, 2014   #3
Thank you Mr Wandering for all corrections)
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Mar 19, 2014   #4
The charts compare the allotments of school expenditure in the UK in three definite years (1981, 1991 and 2001)
It is clear that the workers' salaries were the major expenses, while the smallest percentage of school budget spent to insurance in each year.

.... Excellent introduction and an overview :)

Looking at the graphs more details, there was a slight increase in teachers' salaries, from 40% to half between 1981 and 1991. Meantime, the salaries of other workers declined from less than a quarter to just over a fifth. However, in 2001, teachers were paid 45% of total budget, while 15% of money expended to other workers.

I feel you should have elaborated a bit more in this comparison taking more details into consideration and presenting them with a better analysis;
From 1981 to 1991, the teachers' salaries had been increased by 10% while the expenses on resources and insurance had been increased by 5% and 1% respectively. However, the other workers salaries and expenses on furniture and equipment have dropped during this period by 6% and 10% respectively.

In this body para you compared the figures between the first too decades (first two pie charts).... now do the same for the other two (1991 & 2001) in a new body para


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