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A Touching Story; a dog that I found when I was 10 years old


englishlover 5 / 10  
Apr 12, 2014   #1
Question: Write a story that touched you(either animals or people)

I remember few years ago I have a dog that touched me so much. It was a dog that I found when I was 10 years old.

That very afternoon, I was playing football with my father. My father was a goalkeeper while I keep kicking balls to him. I accidently kicked the ball too hard that it flew out off the football field. When I was about to get back the ball, suddenly a stray dog run towards the ball and hit the ball with its head. The dog was rolling the ball towards me. I was frightened and wanted to ran away as I always afraid of dogs, especially stray dog. But this stray dog was different, it seems friendly and unharmful.

Then, the dog stop rolling the ball when he reached right in front of me. The dog looked at me and wriggled its tail. I started to have a feeling that it wanted me to throw the ball, so I did. I threw the ball and the dog started chasing the ball and rolled the ball back to me. I asked my dad that I wanted to keep the dog. At first, my dad didn't want to but after I persuaded him, he finally agreed. We bring back the dog to home and bathed the dog at the car porch. At night ,we bring the dog to the vet for a medical check-up. At the same time, we bought dog's food, shelter and chain. My father and I decided to named the dog 'ROCKY'.

The next morning, I went for a stroll with Rocky. Every Sunday, I would played with him bomberang together. We speed a lot of time together when i am around at home. One morning....

I don't know how do I continue this story, i wanted to write how the dog touched me, but i have no ideas.
I hope u guys can helo me with this, THANK YOU VERY MUCH!!

dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 12, 2014   #2
I remember few years ago I havehad a dog that touched me so much.

. My father was a goalkeeper while I keepkept kicking balls to him.

When I was about to get back the ball, suddenly a stray dog runran towards the ball and hit the ball with its head.

But this stray dog was different, it seemsseemed very friendly and unharmful.harmless
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Apr 12, 2014   #3
Then, the dog stopped rolling the ball when he reached right in front of me. The dog looked at me and wriggled its tail. I started to have a feelingfelt that it wanted me to throw the ball, so I did. I threw the ball and the dog started chasing the ball and rolled the ball back to me. I askedtold my dad that I wantedlove to keep the dog. At first, my dad didn't wantlike the ideato but after I persuaded him, he finally agreed. We bring backbrought the dog to home and bathed the dogit at the car porch. AtIn the night ,we bringtook the dog to the vet for a medical check-up.
shanz 1 / 5  
Apr 13, 2014   #4
"Until today, I still remember the very dog that had moved and touched me when I was 10 years old.

I was playing football with my father, who was the goalkeeper, when I accidentally kicked too hard, causing the ball to fly out of the football field. As I was heading over towards the ball, a stray dog burst out of nowhere, hit the ball with its head and rolled it over towards me. I got a fright and wanted to flee due to my fear of stray dogs. However, this dog seemed different from the rest and appeared to be friendly and harmless.

The dog stopped before me and wagged its tail excitedly as it stared at me purposefully. I had the vibe that it wanted me to throw the ball, which I did. Immediately, the dog chased after the ball and brought it back to me. I wanted to keep the dog but after persuading my dad, he finally agreed. We brought the dog home and bathed the dog in the car porch. That night, we took the dog to the vet for a medical checkup, and at the same time, purchased a couple of necessary items for our new dog such as dog food and a leash. We decided to name the dog 'Rocky'.

The next morning, I went on a stroll with Rocky. Every Sunday, we would play boomerang together. We spent a lot of time together whenever I was around. One morning..."

Hey 'englishlover'! I've tried my best to edit the whole essay and I hope you like it :D
kserc 1 / 1  
Apr 13, 2014   #5
Well, everyone else has already spotted and corrected/improved your grammar mistakes. I guess all I can help you with is how to continue the story. My advice, you need to find something that you can relate to and help give you a connection to the story. It doesn't necessarily have to be an animal or a person. However, I suggest you go read about the movie plot in Wikipedia called "Red Dog".
Orangeeskies 5 / 9 1  
Apr 13, 2014   #6
Possibly write down a list of emotions you felt after finding the dog. The list may help you realize how the dog touched you, which will result in helping you continue your essay.


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