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Most of the world's poor live in countries where tourism is a growing industry. The issue is that tourism does not benefit the poorest. How can the income generated by tourism benefit the poor? And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional cultures and ways of life? What are your views?
Today's world is divided into developing and industrialized countries. Surprisingly, majority of the poor people live in the developing countries where tourism is one of the major sectors that contribute a lion's share of the economies of the countries. Unfortunately, the income from this sector does not benefit the poorest and this is especially true in countries like India and Indonesia where there are still a large proportion of people living in penury. Apart from that, many are worried that the traditions and cultures of a particular country will deteriorate due to the influx of tourists. Hence, effective solutions must be achieved in order to reduce the problems stated above.
First, the income from the tourism sector can be put to better use by the government of the respective countries by setting up small stalls for the people who are poor. Most locals are usually skilled in making souvenirs or delicacies that are well-known in their countries. Thus, the authorities can advise and encourage the people to produce and sell the items they make at the stalls provided. As a result, on one hand, the poor can earn a living and on the other hand, the tourists will have ample of choices for their shopping. Besides, when the citizens prepare local delicacies, the tourists are exposed to the countries' traditional cuisine and ergo, it will be preserved.
Next, the government of the countries can build a culture village. Tourists visiting this village will be shown to the way of life of the locals in that country. Not only that, they can also experience the traditions and cultures of the various races of people in the country. As what is being done in places like Delhi and Cambodia, traditional dance shows can also be held. This has proved to be successful in attracting customers, primarily tourists to watch and know more about the traditions of the country. To run the shows, local people who are industrious and willing to learn and work can be employed. To conclude, by introducing a culture village, both the country and the poor people will be able to benefit.
To put it in a nutshell, a portion of the income generated through the tourism field can be utilized to help the poor to earn a little profit. Not only will they be able to gain something for themselves, but they will also lend a helping hand to the government to protect and preserve the country's traditions, cultures and customs.
hi Sangeetha,
POSITIVE ASPECTS OF YOUR ESSAY:
-BEAUTIFUL ESSAY... very thoughtful.
-EXCELLENT use of english...hardly any grammatical mistakes
-wide vocabulary used- will give u an advantage.
NEGATIVE ASPECTS OF UR ESSAY:
- As I have posted earlier and almost on all other fellow members' posts, U need to have a minimum 5 para essay... this was told to me by a professor from an IVY LEAGUE US University- who is an expert in evaluating essays.So now its up to u if u wanna follow it.
-to the question -"And how can we ensure that tourism does not destroy traditional cultures and ways of life?"..u have written only the following two lines in your whole essay i think...which i really dont think is sucfficient to support the opinion...
Besides, when the citizens prepare local delicacies, the tourists are exposed to the countries' traditional cuisine and ergo, it will be preserved.
Not only will they be able to gain something for themselves, but they will also lend a helping hand to the government to protect and preserve the country's traditions, cultures and customs.
-good luck
Yeah, I thought of writing it in 5 paragraphs. As I was timing myself, I had about less than 5 minutes for the ending. That was why I just end it there. Is there any way I can trim the length of my essay and write more points?
I thought of just following this concept in writing each paragraph.
1st sentence : topic sentence
2nd n 3rd : supporting details
4th : examples
5th : conclusion
Is that sufficient?
Well Sangeetha, u r right . just follow the structure u have written and just know that time management is the most essential part of any exam... time management in writing n listening is easy in ielts... but in reading u need to have good time mgmnt..ur english can get u a band 7 score min provided u figure out structuring of ur essays.
gud luck
It is looking good...
Here is an idea:
Next, the governments of the countries can build a village of culture.
Hence, effective solutions must be achieved in order to reduce the problems stated above.
I don't like this sentence at the end of the first paragraph. I think it would be good to replace this sentence with a sentence that lists the solutions or discusses some concept that is important for the solutions. The last sentence of the first paragraph is supposed to be the most meaningful sentence of the essay. :-)
