Some people say that tourism has many negative effects on the countries that people travel to. How true is this statement? what can tourists do reduce the harmful effects of tourism on local cultures and environments?
Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.
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Many individuals believe that tourist brings a lot of drawbacks in local society. The local society which is visited by foreign tourists will lost their identity and natural culture. This essay will examine the reasons why tourists give negative effects and discuss some possible solutions.
There are some negative factors resulting of tourism industry. Firstly, the tourism can changing of local wisdom, eventually producing a novel acculturation. In other side, some tourism is not ready to run tourist programs, so that, departure of tourist only offers a lot of problems from their side. Secondly, the number of tourist also causes social jealousy since some tourists show glamour life style such as dress, car, or sophisticated technology . Thirdly, the growth of tourism reduce green area, public space, and green agricultural land, increasing a number of tourist is followed by growth infrastructure like hotel, flat, parking area, restaurant etc. In addition, changing of traditional building into modern architecture happened in tourism like in Bali, Kerinci, or Bukit Tinggi. Event though, in some vocation, irresponsible traveler a write in tourism object like in temple or artifact, other problems they steal or buy an object but is not for sale.
In terms of solution, local people should to protect their culture and object, they must know what culture good to receive or no. For government should give strongly policy and support local inhabitants to proud of their identity. Regularly socialization is an important for local community such as how to increasing their language skill or understanding of cross culture. In the result, they are ready to receive guest from other countries. For traveler, they must keep their attitude, some destination has special rule. So they must know well and obey about information before running travel. It will be better if they learn cross culture also.
To conclude, although tourism brings many negative effects, it will recovered if both tourists and local people aware to prepare themselves. Tourist must know concerning regulation in their trip, also, local people who live in tourism must ready face to travel maker by big smile and government also should give clearly regulation.
hi there! I really think your essay has somewhat grasped onto the concept, however, I believe it is lacking some concrete examples which can further help you explain your claim. Your introduction could use some work, like you could add more content to it. For example:
The tourism industry is one of the fastest and most productive industries in the world. It has contributed to various factors such as economy and promotion, however, there are some drawbacks to it as well. Many individuals believe that touristsbring a lot of drawbacks into the local society. The local society which is visited by foreign tourists will lose their identity and natural culture. This essay will examine the reasons why tourists give negative effects and discuss some possible solutions.
Hello!
Lovely essay you have written. :-) I think you should avoid listing words like 'firstly ', 'secondly' ... and list the points as separate entities, arguing why it holds true. Some grammatical errors also exist but I believe you can sort them out easily. The essay sounds better when you remove these words all together. For example:
Secondly, The number of tourists also causes increases social jealousy since some tourists show glamorous lifestyle such as via dresses, cars or sophisticated technology. Since a glamorous lifestyle is beyond the reach of locals, it causes friction as locals are devoid of such opportunities but the tourist remains oblivious to such.
You can provide relevant examples and argue to make your essay more solid and convincing.
The local society which is visited by foreign tourists will lost their identity and natural culture.lose
In other side, some tourism is not ready to run tourist programs,on the other
the number of tourist also causes social jealousy since some tourists show glamourlife style such as dress, car, or sophisticated technology . glamorous; lifestyle
You need to improve your basic grammar.I've corrected a few for you, and I'm sure you can keep revising on your own.
Irresponsibility Tourists Killed Local Wisdom. This is not a proper title of the essay, because it is one negative effect of tourism in your eyes. Use a more general title.
But the structure of your essay is well organized.If you really want to improve your writing or simply raise the score if youre writing for an exam, you need to pay more attention to the details, such as grammar and coherence.
