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Unlike tourists in the 1960s and '70s, tourists return home with no experience of the local culture

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Oct 12, 2016   #1
According to an international travel magazine, many tourists today fly straight to their holiday resort and almost never leave it. Unlike tourists in the 1960s and '70s, they return home with no experience of the local culture.

Why do you think this happens? How was tourism different in the past?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience.

In the recent several years, air transportation becomes more and more popular and for a lot of tourists because of its fastness and convenience. So now we can easily and fast get to the resorts where we enjoy our holiday without finding route , and I think that changed many people's experience compare to in the past.

In the past, travellers often sought out their own route to their destination and made a plan for their adventure. They walked or rented the motorbike to go to their wanted places, they can use the map and asked local people. After travelling, there were many memorable and interesting stories that they can't forget.

Nowadays, many travel companies provide tourists with cheap deal packages including ticket, accommodation, meal... This means they can be transported from the airport to their hotel. With services which their hotel has, they don't need to go anywhere to purchase, so it is not uncommon to find travellers who never go outside the resort, because their hotel brings them all of things.

Another problems is that travellers have no longer chances to access local people and see the real landscapes. I think that is the fascinating experience which they will be regret if they don't have when travelling. Although some visitors go out, they quickly return to their hotel where they feel safe and comfortable.

This is different from in the past when hotels were simple and didn't have a lot of services for tourrists. They had to find places to eat or beautiful beaches by themselves. I was born in a famous landscape and when I was young, I saw a packbacker who talked to a local person to ask way to place which he wanted to go. I think that was great for everyone. Today, tourists seem to have lost opportunities to meet local people.

Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 38 3  
Oct 13, 2016   #2
Hi Ha Hoang
here some suggestions for your writing

So now we can be easily and fast get to (modal + bare infinitive)

they cancould use the map and ...

from the airport to their the hotel (their means the tourists who own the hotel)

their hotel. With services which their hotel had (better u did not stop there)

Another problems is that travell ers have no

I think that it is the fascinating experience

I saw a packbackerbackpaker who talked

overall, avoid repetition, use an academic word (don't = do not, can't = cannot)
your example should be in body, not in the conclusion. furthermore. your paragraph is too short

Best wisher
Activelung 4 / 13 5  
Oct 13, 2016   #3
I want to be corrected this essay
=> I want to correct this essay. Because you (or a person is) are not a type of writing, right?

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