Writing task 1 - tourists visiting four different attractions in Scotland

TOPIC: THE GRAPH BELOW SHOWS THE PERCENTAGE OF TOURISTS TO SCOTLAND WHO VISITED DIFFERENT ATTRACTIONS BETWEEN 1980 AND 2010.

The line graph illustrates the percentage of tourists visiting four different attractions in Scotland-Aquarium, Castle, Zoo, and Festival-from 1980 to 2010.
Overall, the Festival remained the most popular attraction among tourists during this period, while the Aquarium was the least visited. The percentage of visitors to the Castle increased gradually, whereas the Zoo saw fluctuations but generally maintained a steady trend. The Aquarium experienced a significant decline, especially after 1985, and the Festival showed a gradual decrease in popularity over the years.
In detail, the number of tourists visiting the Aquarium peaked around 1985 but then sharply dropped, ending at the lowest point in 2010. Meanwhile, the Festival started at around 30% and declined slightly but remained quite stable. The Zoo's percentage fluctuated but generally stayed between 10% and 15%. Notably, the percentage of visitors to the Zoo increased after 2005, surpassing the Aquarium for the first time. Overall, these trends reflect changing preferences among tourists in Scotland over the three decades.

P/s: Could you mark my essay based on 4 criteria after reading it? Thanks a lot!

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Your report formatting needs work. You have to present your information within 3-4 paragraphs that are clearly separated by spaces within the presentation. You have to ensure that the individual paragraph formats meet the minimum 3 sentence requirements for each one. Right now, you will lose a lot of points in the TA section because of the incorrect format presentation.

As for the information itself, you are being too vague in the explanation. You need to present the data as given in the image. Refer to the correct percentage numbers per year. Do more year on year comparisons to achieve the information comparison goals. By the way, you presented with line graphs, not just a line graph. Do not forget to look for the overlapping numbers in the graphs. Explain the overlaps as those are small reporting details that can help increase your final score.