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Town development progress

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Sep 9, 2022   #1

how a small town become an urban town

The maps shows information about a town development progress from 1990 to 2005.
Overall, there was a significant progress that change small town become an urban town in the last fifteen years especially in three kind of facilities; transportation, business sector and accommodation.

An airport was built next to school in the northeast town, where the southeast development saw a new ferry port linked to a new railway from the east to west town.

In business sector, a factory was built replacing tress and houses in southeast area, while southwest development saw a new supermarket around the residential area. Meanwhile, a river runs through the middle of the town which divided the tow in two. Talking about accommodation saw constructed some houses that replace a lot of green area in northeast and several apartments were developed in west town close to the lake. In the northeast, two houses were constructed around hospital.
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Sep 10, 2022   #2
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