During the process of civilization, people were trying to identify themselves via answering the questions: who am I and where did I come from? Yet there was no satisfactory answer. Likely, in contemporary world, one can figure out these questions by tracing his family history with the assistance of internet. In fact it has become a fashion and growing number of people are drawing their own family trees. Personally, I perceive this as an undesirable trend.
There are multiple reasons that make contributions to the prevalent of family genealogy. The primary one lies in the human nature. People are eager to find out about the life of their ancestors so as to satisfy their curiosity and sense of belonging, especially for those elderly migrants who want seek roots and honor their long forgotten ancestors. In addition, the pervasive internet access also facilitates the popularization of such trend. In the past, the task of tracing one's family history requires inputs of huge manpower and resources. In comparison the internet has provided an efficient way to build family tree from myriad sources. People do not even need to do the research themselves. Many websites can help them build their family genealogies for free.
Admittedly, tracing family history is a exciting and meaningful experience. However, too obsessed with kin genealogy can be dangerous. Been fascinated by the past, one tend to pay too much attention on the glories or shames of his clan. Anything disgraceful may impose heave psychological burden on him. Besides, concerning about the time and energy waste on such issue, whether it is worthwhile is still doubtful. After all, more emphasis should be placed on the present and make progress.
To sum up, the increasing family history tracing activities can bring negative influences. It is encouraged to honor our ancestors, but we should never stay in the history
in your introduction you said this is an undesirable trend. So.... you should now tell us the reasons as to why you think so. This whole paragraph talks about how it is being done, but nothing is said about justifying your position.
Besides, concerning about the time and energy waste on such issue, whether it is worthwhile is still doubtful. After all, more emphasis should be placed on the present and make progress.
Okkkkkkkk... here it comes. But, with low significance. Your main focus should be on justifying your position. Why you say it is a bad trend?(reasons) How can you convince others that it's a bad trend?(examples)
What is the purpose of this writing? ... It's always good to mention so that others know how to help you align your answer with the question.
Likely, in contemporary world,
.... it should be "Likewise"
but we should never stay in the history
...but we should never live in the past.I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL.
don't miss out on articles: In fact it has become a fashion and a growing number of people
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However, too much obsession with kin genealogy can be dangerous.
Ok....then I would suggest you to read the following essays. They follow this structure very well. Also, by reading other's essays you can pick up good points. Since you need to manage time efficiently, I strongly suggest you to limit your reasons to just one reason per one body para.
