Article Summary, Indigenous 'Chola' Clothing Comes to Fashion Week
Currently, fashion become popular in some countries specially in Bolivia's capital city La Paz where traditional clothes really liked by them. Traditional clothes, bowler hats, handmade macramé shawls, layered skirts and blouses. Many years ago, fashion designer Elianan paco paredes has introduced what she has made at New York city's fashion week last week. She made historical design which attracts people who see it.
Bringing indigenous designs to New York is huge step for paco paredes thought not the first time her clothing has received international recognition. It doesn't just receive in New York but in some place their designed liked. Their designs get response from some people because it shows the identity of local women in La Paz.
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Hope this can help you. Keep writing!!