IELTS General Training; 'growing trend of increasing the retirement age'

General reading task 2:
Topic: In some countries older people are being encouraged to work longer and not to retire. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working beyond retirement age.

Across the globe there is a growing trend of increasing the retirement age or working after retirement. People are cheered to work longer. Every coin has two sides ; Similarly, working longer has its own Pros and Cons. In this essay, I will be presenting my views on advantages and disadvantages on prolonged working.

There are positives of working longer not only to individual but to the society and country as well. Socially, with age comes experience and people are motivated to work longer so that their experience can be best utilized and may help in development of the country and its economy. On the personal front, people who work at an older age remains active and does not feel aloof at home. From economic point of view, people are less dependent on others and as they are working , they pay tax and contribute to country's economy instead of becoming a drain to the economic system.

However, there are many negatives of working longer. First of all, increasing retirement age may lead to more job requirements for youth and finally result in more unemployment for young generation which is a serious problem in almost every developing and under developed countries. Secondly, at a higher age people may face health issues and their degraded health may create serious problems for them .Last but not the least, at an higher age humans cant be as productive as youngsters and would contribute to a less efficient and less productive system which is not desirable in this competitive era.

In conclusion, Working longer has its own advantages like self-dependency , contribution in country's economy contrarily that may cause problems like unemployment for youths; less productive and inefficient system. I believe, citizens should consider both sides of the coin and then decide how long to work.

Dear Varsha,

I believe IELTS task two question will have a line saying " Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working beyond retirement age also give your own opinion based on your experience and knowledge" No matter even if they didn't ask about your opinion. It is always better to provide your own experience in the introduction as last point, nothing harm in that.

Then, Your ideas should be given in a academic manner rather than writing in our day to day conversation language.
For Eg:


---> This could be like this as per my knowledge " However, though there are various benefits obtained through working beyond retirement age, we cannot overlooked the associated issues which it may give rise to"


--> Please be remember that while using not only, you should close it with but also . then the tense should be same at both the places.

Eg: In general working nature of aging population not only beneficial for the individual alone, but also eventually bring positive outcomes to the society as well .

Finally, Try to support your ideas with relevant examples in paragraph 2 and 3.

Good Luck for your wirting!!!

...Arun

You'd better rewrite or omit this expression. What I see is that many students think the memorization of the perfect phrase, like saying, proverbs, etc. is much more acceptable. As a result, they use it every time when they write. And to tell you the truth it doesn't impress the readers at all to finish reading the essay. You may get penalized.

also, I just give additional advise, try to give specific details, you can take some events from your real life, it will make your essay easier to understand and attract more attention of the readers