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The transformation that happened on Taft University's campus from 1980 to 2005 is depicted on maps


mandyduong 4 / 9  
Apr 23, 2017   #1
[IELTS] Summarize the info by reporting the main features about changes of Taft University

university development and change



The transformation that happened on Taft University's campus from 1980 to 2005 is depicted in the maps. Overall, the campus changed from very basic administrative buildings with vast open lands to more academic areas with fewer trees and more open spaces.

To the North of the Main Library and the College of Science, an open space was converted into some blocks of dormitories. Across from this area, in the Northeast, many houses were cleared and replaced with apartments. Moreover, some trees surroundings the Student Union were cut down to make way for an Arts Center and Laboratories in 1984. Seven years later, a bookstore was put in between the Arts Center and the complexes. Furthermore, a hospital was built opposite the Administration meanwhile to the far-east of the hospital, a church was installed on the corner of Fifth Avenue and Palmer Street.

To the West of the supermarket, in the South, a huge open space was transformed into a Sports and Wellness Facility in 2003. To the Southwest of this area, apart from the two new parking lots, an Event Office was established in the same year. Looking at the maps, an airport was installed after demolishing an industrial area in the Southeast corner

az23 5 / 13  
Apr 23, 2017   #2
@mandyduong
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Since the info in the question is not provided, it is hard to tell if you have summarized sufficiently. However, I think the essay, with its opening paragraph and two following paragraphs with specific details, is well written.
Holt - / 7,528 2001  
Apr 23, 2017   #3
Huong, you again failed to provide a copy of the illustration that you were provided with for the summary. Why can't you do it? The instruction is pretty simple, just click on the image link and upload the image. I have already told you that I cannot accurately provide you with the help that you need to improve in your essay writing without it. I truly hope that you are not just being hard headed and uncooperative because what I am asking for is not for myself but for me to use in helping you. That is, if you really want my professional help. In as far as I can tell, the essay that you wrote might be alright. However, your opening summary seems to be lacking some important discussion points because it is too short and does not carry a relevant discussion outline. Again, without the image, I cannot tell you what information you could have added in that part to make your essay get a better grade. You lack a period at the end of your final sentence in the last paragraph. That tells the examiner that this is sloppy work and he will reduce your GRA score because of it. I am also not sure if you accurately accomplished the task expected because of the lack of the image. Overall, it does not seem like you really want accurate and professional help. I hope you will change your mind and be more cooperative by simply uploading the image for review use.


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