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Travel is in a group led by a tour guide may be expensive


Asselya /  
Nov 13, 2008   #1
Best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide?

Nowadays there are too many things, which keep us in stress: our job, traffic jam, problems in personal live. And of course, many of us want to forget these problems in exotic countries, sightseeing the seven wonders, visit to place that you have seen in advertisement or just to open something new for ourselves. First questions that we have to decide is should we travel in a group led by a tour guide or by ourselves.

To start with, traveling in a group led by a tour guide is usually provides for average social class; however it is not always cheep. For example, as in every country, to travel in my country, Kazakhstan, travel agency usually takes money for every your step: for guide, for food, for transportation, for place that you going to take or just gives program "all including", of course, rest of which you will not try, but prices are including for everything too. But the best and the cheapest way to travel in my country is to rent the transportation, buy a good guide book and map, and go to see our picturesque steppe in central Kazakhstan, high mountain in south part and forests in north part. In any of these parts u can tastes our national food "beshparmac" and stops in special removable house called "kees ui", all of these are our tradition, all of these are question for what are Kazakh and Kazakhstan like.

Another disadvantage, traveling with tour guide is that it is usually boring and no impressions and experiences. Travel company worries about sightseeing a program, about transportation, but company does not worry about are you interested in it. While you are watching, guide retelling to you facts and dates without any enthusiasms. But if you will ask from any citizen why this is so important for you, how was it, every citizen will correctly and obligingly tell you what, why and how it was, because it is Kazakh's nature to be hospitality and to know our hard history.

On the other hand, traveling without guide is dangerous. In every country if local people guess that you are alone tourist, they will try to trick you, to invite to date and even to bit you, which will not be with guide in a group.

In summary, I would rather to travel without tour guide. Because I will have more experiences, more impressions, more information and more reasons to make my friends jealous.

EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Nov 13, 2008   #2
Good afternoon :)

Because you did not describe what kind of assistance you are seeking, I have edited the first section and then made some general comments on the remainder of the piece.

"Nowadays there are too many things which keep us stressed: our jobs, traffic jams, problems in personal lives. And of course, many of us want to forget these problems in exotic countries; sightseeing the seven wonders, a visit to place that youAvoid the pronoun "you" in formal academic writing; try "me," "I," or "one" instead. have seen in advertisement or just to open something new to oneself.The first question that has to be answered is, should travel be done in a group led by a tour guide or alone ?"

My main concern in this piece is grammar. For instance, "To start with, traveling in a group led by a tour guide is usually provides for average social class; however it is not always cheep." There is a spelling mistake as well as bad grammar in the piece. It should be something like, "To start with, traveling in a group led by a tour guide is usually accessible for the average social class; however, it is not always cheap."

To assist with grammar mistakes, I suggest one of the books from the "Prentice Hall Guide for College Writers" series written by Stephen Reid. You can pick any of them up cheap used, or get them from the library. I think there are six in the series now, and any of them would help you here. To help with the spelling errors, run the piece through a spell-checking program such as Word or the Mozilla web browser to catch them. Word will also help you with some grammatical errors. Also, there are many grammar guides online.

Mechanically, make sure that when you are using quotation marks (") that your punctuation is enclosed in those marks. For instance, "kees ui", should be "kees ui,".

When using commas to make a list, make sure that you place one after each item in the list. For example, "Because I will have more experiences, more impressions, more information and more reasons to make my friends jealous" should be "Because I will have more experiences, more impressions, more information, and more reasons to make my friends jealous."

I hope this helps you get started.


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