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IELTS TASK 2: Traveling to a new place or a familiar place


Anaguna 21 / 27 5  
Apr 4, 2016   #1
Some people like to travel to somewhere new and different when they go on holiday, while others prefer familiar places.
Do you think there are more advantages or disadvantages to visiting new places?


Sightseeing is going to another place either familiar place or a new place in order to have a holiday. Many people are more likely to visit new destination while other thinks that they prefer going to the usual place. Travelling in both of places has merits and demerits and I would argue that driving to the novel place may lead people feeling different adventure and exploring breathtaking scenery than going to the familiar place.

To begin with, instead of holidaying in the new place may be having some disadvantages. First, people probably get lost in their road since they go just through distinctive lane. They discover new track and it is difficult when they go at the first time. In additional, generally, most of the visitors can get difficult to find dinner. This is because desiring for diets is a problem when visiting the new place, people do not know the best place for eating mouth-watering menus. So, most of the travelers can get inconvenience in holidaying.

On the other hand, there are several advantages going tourism in the unusual place. The more that people go to the new place, the more adventure the tourism sense. They can be more adventurous since they experience unconventional ways and meet with the new personality. Moreover, the visitors are encouraged traversing new areas because the landscape of each place is dissimilar and it is better to discover all new sightseeing in the uncommon place. Additionally, for certain people who loves photographs, they can be capturing moments of outstanding views in the destination is the best moment.

In conclusion, although driving to the new place gives some disadvantages, I believe that the benefits contribute more interest for people to get on holidaying in the newly destination. Where possible, it is better off making a traveler to usual place since the unusual place is an interesting experience.

LaPolo11 12 / 28  
Apr 4, 2016   #2
Sightseeing is going to another place either familiar place or a new place in order to have a holiday . this word is pretty confusing
I totally do not understand these words

is going to

BE GOING TO means WILL
Hadiyati Fudla 9 / 14 3  
Apr 4, 2016   #3
Hi Anaguna! Marvelous writing! You write it in good sequence. Let me try to give you some suggestions.

1. while other thinks that they prefer going -> others think that (use the plural form)

2. To begin with, instead of holidaying in the new place may be having some disadvantages. (we use insted to show a contrast idea. but I do not find it. your sentence will be better and the mining is appropriate if you do not use that word)

3. Where possible, it is better off making a traveler to (may be it just a typo, i think you want to say 'it is better of making a trip to')
wahyu 16 / 28 1  
Apr 4, 2016   #4
whats app Anaguna your essay is good, i have a suggestion to your conclusion paragraph :
you can make more than 2 sentences and
you could use this pattern :
1. restatement the question
2. opinion,
3. new idea such as hope, recommendation

I hope that my suggestions help.

... I absolutely believe that the benefits contribute more interest for people to get on ...
I recommend that it is better off making a traveler ....... experience.
wahyu 16 / 28 1  
Apr 7, 2016   #5
Good morning Ana your essay is good, i have a suggestion to your conclusion paragraph :
you can make more than 2 sentences and
you could use this pattern :
1. restatement the question
2. opinion,
3. new idea such as hope, recommendation

I hope that my suggestions help.

In conclusion, although driving to the new [...] is an interesting experience.

My suggestion :
To sum up, it is evident that there are several merit and drawbacks for driving to the new spots. I absolutely believe that the benefits contribute more interest for people to get on holidaying in the newly destination. Then i recommend to the folks that it is better off making a traveler to usual place since the unusual place is an interesting experience.


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