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"Treaty No.7" - The TV show that I like the most


nguyentuandhmdc 1 / -  
Sep 20, 2014   #1
In recent times, there are many interesting programs on TV channels but the program has brought the most impressive for me that is "Treaty No.7"

It was broadcast at 1 pm, Saturday for weekly on VTV3 channel. This was the reality television program to perform the characters' dreams, who have special circumstances to become a reality.

I still remember the first time I watched the program, when that it talked about a guy, who had Wilson disease - It is body-shrinking disease. But by virtue of himself, he was not only overcame fate of himself also had a warm heart. He sat on a wheelchair to beg for money to help the children disabilities. The "Treaty No.7" gave surprising gifts for him and he was very moved.

As soon as I watched it I was very move and crying. I told myself that I would help people with special circumstances if I get a chance.

nickyzhi 8 / 21 8  
Sep 20, 2014   #2
hey neoy,

There are some clear faults in your grammar, I'll pick it out :)

but the program has brought

how about but the a program has brought

who have special circumstances to become a reality.

which will come ture in special circumstances.

when that it talked about a guy, who had Wilson disease

there is a guy with Wilson disease.

he was not only overcame fate of himself also had a warm heart.

I can't figure it out this sentence's meaning.

to beg for money

begging money


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