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TED : How tress talk each other


Iforsa 35 / 54 5  
Aug 18, 2016   #1
The presented video in TED.COM lectured by Suzanne Simard highlights about how tress talk each other. Suzanne investigated forest over 30 years. She conducted a research about interaction of each tree in Canadian forest. She used unique way by covering plastic bags for her trees and then injected the bags with different gases, for control method she used replica without exposed any gases. Radioactive carbon-14 carbon dioxide gas and some high pressure bottles of the stable isotope carbon-13 carbon dioxide gas were injected respectively. She used two isotopes because she wondered whether there was two way communication going on between those species. Subsequently, she found that each tree that had been injected gases before had same sounds whether was injected with C-13 or C14. Different result reveled from replica trees. She did not find any sounds and suggested those plants was not connected into the other exposed gases plants. This result showed that C-13 and C-14 were in a lively two-ways conversation.

akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Aug 18, 2016   #2
Hi Sofi.
I am pleased to read your writing since you have shown the great progress. I have got the points of your summary. However, I will give you a few suggestion to develop the quality of this writing.


... Simard highlights about how tress TREES talk each other. Suzanne investigated A forest over 30 years. She conducted a research about AN interaction of each tree in THE Canadian forest. She used HARNESSED two isotopes (...) there was two-wayS communication going ...

... had been injected gases before PREVIOUSLY had same sounds whether ...
Different result reveled REVEALED from THE replica trees.
... plants was not connected into TO the other exposed gases plants.
Note: Please, you avoid the repetitive word.

I am looking forward to meeting your writing again.
Overall, it's a good job.
azmi23 17 / 28 3  
Aug 19, 2016   #3
Hi , maybe i'd like to give a try to give some suggestion.

Suzanne has investigated forest for over than 30 years.
... plastic bags for her experimental trees and then (...) for controlling method she used a replica without exposed any gases.
Different result reveled from the replica treesones . She did not find any sounds andtherefore she suggested those plants was not ...

and i suggest you to create sentence more effectively, for example " Suzanne, who has investigated forest for over than 30 years, used unique way ...."

happy writing!


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