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IELTS TASK 1 : TRIP TO WORK IN HOUSTON, TEXAS


aryaayra 7 / 19 2  
Apr 15, 2014   #1
The table gives the information concerning trip to work in Houston, Texas, while the bar chart shows how much emissions containing in each transports used.

Firstly, according to the table shows that the highest percentage of travelers of per form of transport is spotted on "car (1 person) at 43 age " and followed by "train or bus at 37 per cent as the second top up which travelers have 47 age". For the lowers rates, "car (more than 1 person) where the workers are 44 years old" and the lowest rates "cycle / walk' has 4 percent and 39 years old as average age among them.

Secondly, the bar chart displays which the biggest contain of Co2 emissions gets from "car with only for 1 person" at 0.32 kilograms per kilo metre. Releasing until 0.08 kg of CO2, "car (4 persons) is the second huge of amount of producing emissions. On the other hand, "bus or train" and "cycle or walk" give a good effect correlated on their emission which is not more than 0.01 kg of CO2 substance.

Lastly, the most popular and the worst form of transport is "car (1 person)" which often to use by workers and produces much air pollution.




OP aryaayra 7 / 19 2  
Apr 15, 2014   #2
1. Introduce the graph (paraphrase the title of the graph, make sure you include the time frame if there's one)

1. Introduce the graph (paraphrase the title of the graph, make sure you include the time frame if there's one)

i am so sorry to put on the question of the graphs, which I was explain it immediately as my paraphrase

Here it is.. " The table and the bar chart below give information about traveling to work in Houston,Texas. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Buddies.. please kindly need your comments correlated my explanations.. :(
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Apr 17, 2014   #3
You don't need to write

Firstly,

Secondly,

Lastly,

. This can be categorized as "shopping list", showing immature writing.
Here is I share a link to show you the key to organizing your body paragraphs for an IELTS writing task 1 is to group data together where there are patterns.
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Apr 28, 2014   #4
This can be categorized as "shopping list", showing immature writing.

I totally agree with eddies.

Arya, there are 5 types of paragraphs which are usually used by writer.
1. Listing
2. Squence
2.1 Time
2.2 Process
3. Comparison and contrast
4. Problem and solution
5. Cause and effect.

Most of IELTS students usually are using listing paragraph in writing task 1. Whereas, we should implement the comparison and contrast paragraph in our writing to inform the detail information.
niesaysi 16 / 284 83  
Apr 28, 2014   #5
eddies:
This can be categorized as "shopping list", showing immature writing.

For me, probably, that way of organizing body paragraphs is very common in writing. However, let us not forget that it is one way to achieve coherence ( putting ideas in chronological order). Furthermore, they are not just as "listing words" ; they also act as transitional devices which is one consideration to earn points.

:)


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