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Is it true that people's worth is related to their social status and material possessions?


raflo 2 / 3  
Jan 27, 2014   #1
A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material

hello!!! It's my first essay,which I write to EssayForum. Please, give me some advice to write effective essays.thank you in advance!!!

At the present time some people hold the viewpoint that people's worth is related to their social status and material possessions ,not to their honour ,kindness and trust.and I have to partly disagree with this statement.There is alot of controversery about it.In this essay I am going to examine this question from my both points of view.

First of all, in the past diginty of a person is measured by their behaviour ,character and ability. Because the more they had personal features and abilities ,the more they were appreciated. For instance, kings were fair and they looked up to their honourable and trustworthy people and they collected reliable people as an employee.

However, nowadays this habit is less appreciated by modern people. Usually people are in touch with people who have social rank or wealth. This habit brings them more opportunities and utilities than the poor can give them.For example,in one office one worker looks up more to their boss than maids of this this office, inspite of maids' honour, kindness.Since people can obtain more benefits from their boss than maids.

Moreover, there are also people who appreciate personal features in the world. Because financial benefit is not enough to live happily. A good example of this is that, one ill person need whoever's kindness not social status or valuable possessions.

Overall, i think the most important thing in dignity of person is personal features such as kindness and trust, not people's social title or wealth.

Fardhani Putri 23 / 46 7  
Jan 27, 2014   #2
Hi Raflo!

not to their honour ,kindness and trust

not to their honour but kindness and trust

,kindness and trust.and I have to partly disagree with this statement

kindness and trust. I have partly disagree with this statement
I think its uncommon to put And after dot

Because the more they had personal features and abilities ,the more they were appreciated

Because the more they had personal features and abilities ,the more they were appreciated

Overall, your essay is good
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jan 27, 2014   #3
There isare alot of controverserycontroversies about it.In this essay I am going to examine this question from my both points of view

Because the more they had personal features and abilities ,the more they werehad more appreciated.

For instance, kings were fair and they looked up to their honourable and trustworthy people, and they collected reliable people as an employee.

as long as i know, "and" is used for connecting two sentences. perhaps you should give koma in the third sentence.

This habit brings them more opportunities and utilities than the poor can give them.

This habits brings more opportunities and utilities for people who have much money than poor people, who do not have enough money, have less chance.

In my eyes your essay is good, but you have to pay attention with your grammar and content.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jan 28, 2014   #4
.In this essay I am going to examine this question from my both points of view.

.... It's better had you concluded your introduction with the statement that expressed your opinion.
OP raflo 2 / 3  
Jan 28, 2014   #5
Thanks a lot for your attention and useful advice!!!
Pahan 1 / 1,907 553  
Jan 28, 2014   #6
Because the more they had personal features and abilities ,the more they were appreciated.

In the past, the more good qualities that a person had the more he or she was appreciated.

For instance, kings were fair and they looked up to their honourable and trustworthy people and they collected reliable people as an employee.

I don't think this is a convincing example. Not all kings were fair and also not all of them treated good people well. For example, Shajahan the Mogul king said to have cut the hands off of the architect who designed Taj Mahal. I don't think it's a very unfair thing to do. When you provide examples they need to be more specific and convincing. That's the whole purpose of supporting your reasons with examples.
OP raflo 2 / 3  
Feb 2, 2014   #7
Thank Pahan for your valuable information!


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