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Truth in relationship between people


sou78 3 / 3 2  
Feb 16, 2020   #1

being honest with each other



What is the truth? The broad definition of the truth is to be honest and to not lie. Some people believe that not telling the truth can be an easy way to strength your friendship, marriage, or partnership. The both side can lie sometimes to complete their relationships and to stay together. However, this is not true. When one person starts to be dishonest, he or she will destroy any bonds with the other side. They cannot establish any conversation and have any agreement. Therefore, telling the truth can be hard sometimes, but it will help to have a strong relationship. This essay will explain why I hold this opinion.

The confidence can help to build a strong relationship between two people. When they trust each other, they will have a strong bind and they will be closer. This type of tie between them can be stronger and more powerful, when they are telling the truth and they do not lie to each other. In contrary, when the both sides are dishonest to each other, they will face many problems and they will have a weak relationship. The lack of truth will destroy and ruin their life. For example, my friend Jon had a very nice and beautiful relationship with his ex-wife. They were living together and they were working together. They had a successful life until Jon decided to not tell his wife about his bankruptcy. He thought that if she did not know about his financial problems, she would be better and she would not get angry. However, he was wrong because his wife was spending money like a crazy and she borrowed many loans from the bank. After one year, they had big problems with the bank and they went to gail because they could not pay their mortgages.

Truth is the platform to build a strong relationship between people. When people are honest, it will be easy for them to communicate. This honest relationship will open the door for a deep conversation and they will solve their problems easier because they trust each other. As a result, they will feel happy and satisfied about their life and relationships.

In conclusion, we have to consider that telling the truth is very important in any relationships. Even though some people believe that lying can be a good solution to be close to our beloveds, I highly recommend my friends and my family to be honest and to not lie on each other.
Holt  Educational Consultant - / 14,767 4773  
Feb 17, 2020   #2
While there are some incorrect vocabulary uses in the essay, this did not diminish the clarity of the written presentation. Your stance as to why honesty is important in a relationship is very clear. Though there are grammar issues in the presentation, you still managed to remain coherent and cohesive in terms of your discussion. However, you need to learn when to place a break in a paragraph to create a new but connected paragraph. This was the situation for your second paragraph.

The example discussion should have been presented as a separate paragraph since it was discussing an example of the importance of honesty in a relationship. The paragraph, in the current form is difficult to read and track on the page. By separating the topic discussions into 2 paragraphs, the ease of reading could have been helped.

Errors in spelling tend to make the reader question what you mean. For example, did you mean to use the term "gail" which is not a real word, instead of "jail"? Gail is actually the name of a woman, not a reference to a place. Grammar errors include the failure to use a comma after a conjunction, using the plural form of the word side (sides),
hallynguyen13579 3 / 4 3  
Feb 17, 2020   #3
In the first paragraph, I think you did well when having reason and specific examples to illustrate. However, you did not do the same for the second paragraph and that will be a big minus. Therefore, try to follow this form in your paragraphs in an essay.

Besides, you should review your opening and shorten to make it suitable. I feel some unnecessary parts contained in your opening paragraph.
Gaucho 8 / 15  
Feb 18, 2020   #4
Some grammatical and spelling mistakes:

-... the truth is, to be honest, and DO not lie.
-... easy way to STRENGTHEN your friendship,...
-The both SIDES can lie sometimes ...
-... and more powerful, when ...

-In contrary, when the both sides ...
-... they went to JAIL because ...
-... and satisfied WITH their ...


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