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Two different methods to collect water for puring irrigation channels


ekalamarsyari11 72 / 108 9  
Aug 23, 2016   #1
The diagrams below show two methods of collecting water for irrigation purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The presented diagrams illustrate how to collect water for irrigating farmland by two different ways. These methods take the water from ground but the first one needs labour intensive while another method is done by animal.\

Firstly, method named swing basket is used to collect water from 1- 2 metres depth under the ground. It consists of a basket made of bamboo or leather and tied ropes. This method is very simple because it only needs two persons who lift the basket contained water up to the hill and swing it to the irrigation channels.

Other method is rope and bucket. It is designed with pulley system in order to collect water from 50 metres depth under the ground. Furthermore, this method use a bucket connected to the system and a cow that pull the bucket downhill. Then, water will pour the irrigation channels and flow to the farmland.

In conclusion, those methods are really useful technique to accommodate water supplies to the farmland. It use different kind of power source to collect water from different depth of water under ground.



tyar32 10 / 14  
Aug 23, 2016   #2
Hi ekalamarsyari11
I have some suggestions for you. I hope it will help to develop your writing skill.

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good

tyar32
bung ilham 14 / 30  
Aug 23, 2016   #3
aloha ekalamarsyari11, below are my suggestions:

These methods take out the water from ground.buthowever, the first one needs labour ...

Firstly, the method named swing basket ...

Otheranother method is rope and bucket.
Furthermore, this method uses a bucket connected to the system and a cow that pullpulling the bucket downhill.

In conclusion, those methods are really useful technique to ...(as far as my knowledge, Writing task 1 just needs an overview in the first paragraph and also conclusion is not longer needed, cmiiw)
justivy03 - / 2,366 607  
Aug 23, 2016   #4
Hi Eka, here's my take on your analysis.

- The presented diagrams illustrate how to collect water
- for irrigatingto irrigate the farmland by two different ways.
- These methods take the water from the ground
- but the first one needs labour intensive while anotherthe other
- method is done by animal.\by our dear animal friends.

- Firstly , the method named swing basket
- is used to collect water from 1- 2 metresmeters deep
- depth under the ground.
- leather and tied with ropes.
- persons whoto lift the basket

- OtherThe other method is rope and bucket.
- metres depthmeters deep under the ground.

- thosethis methods are really
- useful techniques to accommodate
- It uses different kind

There you have it Eka, I hope the suggestions above help you in your revision and for future writing reference, mind your sentence construction and try to create sentences that will best describe your analysis.


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