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The two illustrations show Coca-cola Company's percentage of sales in a pie graph


Lady Elle 5 / 8  
Jan 4, 2015   #1
The two illustrations show Coca-cola Conpany's percentage of sales in a pie graph and share price in a line graph from year 1996 to 2001.

The pie chart shows that among these countries namely, North America, Africa and Middle East, Asia, Europe and Latin America, it is quite obvious that North America has the highest percentage of sales with 30.4%. It is then followed by Latin America with 25.7% and Europe with 5.2% difference from Latin America. However, poor sales is evident in Africa and Middle East with only 7.0%.

The line graph however, depicts the share prices of Coca-Cola from 1996 to 2001. It can be seen that in 1996, the share price was only $35, and then dramatically rose to $70 in 1997, double the price of the previous year. Unfortunately, the share price fell slightly to approximately $55 but the company was able to increase its share to more or less $80 the following year, making 1998 the most remarkable year for the company so far. But then, 2 years later, the company suffered a loss of share price that dropped to only about $48-$60.

Please feel free to make any corrections and if you could mark my work, that would be great! Thanks! :)
narryotp 1 / 2 1  
Jan 4, 2015   #2
The writing is really well done but there are slight grammar errors.

shows that among these countries namely , North America, Africa and Middle Ea

But then, However, 2 years
violethoang 2 / 5 1  
Jan 4, 2015   #3
The two illustrations show Coca-cola Conpany's percentage of sales (where? which countries?) in a pie graph and share price in a line graph from year 1996 to 2001.

The pie chart shows that among these(have you ever mentioned any countries above, if yes, you can say "these"countries) namely,.... Idon't think that you can say 'these countries, namely...".

Also, I think you should try to look up for some sample answers in Cambridge IELTS books, you will find out this report essays really need overview which you missed in your essay.

On the other hand, for the next post, please include the chart and the requirement also.
OP Lady Elle 5 / 8  
Jan 4, 2015   #4
I was a bit unsure about it myself. I was using my mobile phone when I posted this. Thank you! :)


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