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'I was two months pregnant' - A decision that has changed my life

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Nov 21, 2008   #1
Everyone has made a decision that has changed his or her life. A decision that I made has changed my life is deciding to become a single mother.

A few years ago, my child's father has left me when I was two months pregnat. I was 19 years old at the time when I found out I was pregnant. I had todrop out of high school so I can support my incoming baby and myself. I felt angry, depressed, and confused because I was not able to raise a child as a single mother and I was barely supporting myself so I decided to have an abortion.

In the past, I thought rasing a child as a single parent would be a waste of time. I had visions of traveling tp many parts of Africa, becoming a lawyer, and going to many clubs. I do not want to have a child before marriage. I had couple of friends with children ans I could see how it has impacted on their lives. I thought I wasn't parpared, but I knew the reality of having a baby.

After listening to my grandmother advice, I realize that I no longer has a choice and need to realize that my old life is gone ansdthere is no turning back. I also realized that I have an innocent baby was growing inside of me. If I decided to have an abortion, it wasn't going to solve anything, but bring more pain and misery into my life.I was taking away a life that I had created. so, that day I decided that I was going to become a mother to my child. This decision was very difficult for me, but I like other challenges so I decied to resolve it by reading or researching the issue of becoming a mother. I also collected baby books to fine the answer, and researching the Internet hoping to find the key to managing my new life as a mother.

so, in conclusion, this decision of becoming a single mother has changed my life forever it also has taught me that it is more to life If I just have a stronger focus no matter what the outcome may be.
EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Nov 21, 2008   #2
Make sure you are capitalizing the first words of every sentence. "so" should be capitalized.

At this point your conclusion is confusing because you don't really explain yourself adequately through the essay. You open the piece up by discussing an abortion, yet carry on the rest of the piece from the point of view of a single mother. Did you have another baby, or are you presenting a "what if" scenario? Please clarify, because I have a feeling this would be a great essay if only we could follow it better.

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