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# IELTS 1:Type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2
Apr 24, 2014   #1
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph illustrates change in the number and king of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

Generally, it can be seen that the graph shows rate of people in Australian who like several foods.

Firstly, in 1975 teenager in Australia liked eating pizza approximately 5 people per year which climbed slightly in 1980 with rates 18 persons per year and it rose sharply until 1995 among 82 people. However, it remained reasonably steady between 1995 and 2000. By contrast, people were interested hamburgers for eating from 1975 approximately 17, and it rose sharply in 1985 with rates 85 people per year. Next, it remained reasonably for year later from 1995 to 2000.

Secondly, teenager were consuming food such as fish and chips which were in 1975 approximately 100 number of time per year. However, in 1980, it began to fall among 85 people per year, and despite slight rise among 90 people per year in 1985, continued to decrease sharply more less 80 people per year until 40 people in 2000.

To sum up, it can be concluded that number of people were consuming pizza and hamburgers which is normally more less 80 people per year.

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553
Apr 24, 2014   #2
The graph illustrates change in the number and king of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

This is pretty confusing dear Eva :( You need deliver your intro crystal clearly :)
The graph illustrates the trends of fast food consumption by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.

Generally, it can be seen that the graph shows rate of people in Australian who like several foods.

This is a very poor overview. You need to provide us some meaningful picture about the graph;
Overall, Australian teenagers have increased their consumption of Hamburgers and Pizza while they have cut down the consumption of fish and chips during this period under review.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592
Apr 24, 2014   #3
I believe I suggested you an appropriate structure for this task in one of your other threads. However, you have not followed that approach here.