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IELTS writing Task-2 which type of teaching is better indoor or outdoor


roop1 2 / 2  
Mar 3, 2014   #1
Education is the most important part of a healthy society in general and personal life in private. Education is the process of giving the systematic information specially schools or university. There are different ways of conveying knowledge depends upon person to person. Some prefer to study at home where others love to go to school.

First of all, outdoor teaching gives the opportunities to children to learn from others in terms of cooperation, sharing thoughts with outside world and how to explore their ideas in different subjects.

Moreover in outdoor teaching the students have other students for competition so, they improve their self accordingly. More precisely, school and university students learn how to live in this multi culture society there are different types of seminar and conferences are conducted to learn social environment Furthermore they can learn the things by doing thins practically with advance infrastructure.

On the other hand some parents think that their children are safe at home so they prefer to teach their children by their own experience or via technology. Trend has been changed they use computer , online education or multimedia equipments to teach children at their place . children hold their concentration more precisely at home because there are less elements of disturbance and having less restrictions.

To sum up, we can say there are some development of students are there which they can learn from home and other they can learn from school. In outdoor education they learn to live in modern world where in indoor they learn their responsibilities related to their parents.
d96nguyen 5 / 11 4  
Sep 13, 2014   #2
roop1
Education is the most important part of a healthy society in general and personal life in private. Education is the process of giving the systematic information specially schools or university. There are different ways of conveying knowledge depends upon person to person. Some prefer to study at home where others love to go to school.

Education is the most important part of a healthy society in general and personal life in private. Education is the process of giving the systematic information specially to schools or universities. There are many different ways of conveying knowledge from person to person. Some people prefer to study at home while others love to go to schools.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Sep 13, 2014   #3
Education is the most important part of a healthy society in general and personal life in private. Education is the process of giving the systematic information specially schools or university. There are different ways of conveying knowledge depends upon person to person. Some prefer to study at home where others love to go to school.

Simply paraphrase the question. You can use periodic sentence to open a strong thesis statement, such aswhile some people argue that academic activities should be done as indoor activities, some others believe that outdoor teaching gives students opportunities to learn practically and philosophically . Therefore, I believe educational stakeholders should allow young students to work creatively in both indoors and outdoors.

outdoor teaching gives the opportunities to children to learn from others in terms of cooperation, sharing thoughts with outside world and how to explore their ideas in different subjects.

Control every sentence you have. This brings you avoid writing redundancy information.outdoor teaching gives opportunities to children to learn from others in terms of cooperation: sharing thoughts

More precisely, school and university students learn how to live in this multi culture society there are different types of seminar and conferences are conducted to learn social environment Furthermore they can learn the things by doing thins practically with advance infrastructure.

Well, I think young children don't have to get involved in seminar and conferences as to learn social environment. In the outside playground children can learn ecology: watching butterflies learns to fly and plants grow. By this, I am sure that children are more likely to enjoy and remember what they have learned due largely to some engaging plays in personal meaningful.
profes 3 / 9  
Sep 14, 2014   #4
I think that the introduction needs more reformulation to delver a good impression to the corrector at first you should make a generalized view about the topic and then you include your point of view with a clear presentation of all the essay parts so that you will ensure a good start in your work. This plan included in the introduction should be written after finishing the body of the essay : it's a method used by playwrights to ensure the logic and the coherence of the essay. Good Luck


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