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4 types of landfill waste in Molovia, Bratistan, Atlantis, Senia and Vatania


Hang Le 2 / 6 1  
Jun 11, 2014   #1
The graph compares the data of 4 types of landfill waste in Molovia, Bratistan, Atlantis, Senia and Vatania in 2010. Overall, the percentage of construction waste was higher than the other waste while agriculture waste was the smallest category, with the exception of Batista.

Noticeably, Atlantis, Selenia and Vatania had fairly distribution of different kinds of waste. These countries had highest proportion in construction waste, at around 30% each, but smallest level in agriculture with just under 20%. On the other hand, there was around 22-25% of landfill was electronic waste, while the figure for household waste was 25%, 29% and 22% respectively.

In comparison, Molovia and Bratistan had different profiles. Agriculture waste in Bratistan had the highest rate among the five countries, at about 55%, but the figure for electronic was smallest with only less than 5%. In Monolovia, household waste and construction waste had the similar rate with nearly 35% while electronic and agriculture waste was the same, accounting for 15% of the total of landfill in this country.

nitex 1 / 14 4  
Jun 13, 2014   #2
erm what do you want to ask about ?
OP Hang Le 2 / 6 1  
Jun 13, 2014   #3
Can you check grammar errors for me? I'm not sure about my grammar
fikri 5 / 317 71  
Jun 13, 2014   #4
when you describe a picture, you must include the picture in your post by attach file,
tiaDS 73 / 235 52  
Jun 14, 2014   #5
Noticeably, Atlantis, Selenia and Vatania had fairly distribution of different kinds of waste. These countries had recorded thehighest largest proportion in of construction waste garbage, at around 30% each, but the smallest level in agriculture with just under 20%. On the other hand, there was around 22-25% of landfill whichwas electronic waste, (rewrite this sentence, you have 2 verb, so you have to give conjuction) while the figure of household waste wasreached 25%, 29% and 22% respectively.

You have to improve your lexical resources.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Jul 24, 2014   #6
when you describe a picture, you must include the picture in your post by attach file,

.... Yes, this is very important :) You need to upload the image presentation to EF for us to have a closer look at it and align our feedbacks accordingly. Use the feature "Attach File (s)" in the Message block and upload your files :)
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,195 459  
Jul 24, 2014   #7
the smallest category

the ... est + noun followed by in/of/that, e.g the smallest category in this type.

There was around 22-25% of landfill was electronic waste

grammar problem. This contains two verbs.
Possible solution: there was around 22-25% of landfill with electronic waste

The graph compares the data of 4 types of landfill waste in Molovia, Bratistan, Atlantis, Senia and Vatania in 2010. Overall, the percentage of construction waste was higher than the other waste while agriculture waste was the smallest category, with the exception of Batista.

Write the intro and overview in different paragraphs.


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