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A typical day of the underground station, rush hours in London train station - IELTS task 1


Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Feb 11, 2015   #1
The line graph provides a breakdown information in term of the number of people who rely on London Underground station on a typical day.

If analyzed, the data show that there is always a significant rise of people in the early morning as well as in the mid evening.

Initially, the number of people stands at 100 at six o'clock. After 2 hours, this figure peaks to 400 people, while this value is huger than the number of people at 10 o'clock for almost 200, with a slight increase from 10 o clock to 14 o clock. The value plummets after 14 o clock to roughly 100 people at 16:00. Subsequently, the story almost repeats itself as the beginning, since at 18:00, there is approximately 400 people and then, the number dropped to close to 100 people at 20:00. The story ends with some insubstantial fluctuations up and down during 20:00 to 22:00.

The data suggest that the rush hours of London station are at 8 o clock in the morning and at 6pm.




dunguyen 9 / 19 6  
Feb 11, 2015   #2
My humble thoughts: your essay is wanting in holistic views, particularly in your detection/generalization of trends. I suppose that trends are what you should draw or interpret from the graph. You told the statistics of the graph but not the story implicated under the graph. I would go straightly to point out the peak time, gave some possible reasons behind these statistics.

Hope these help!


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