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[IELTS]The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by 2050

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Jun 9, 2020   #1
The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is clear that development in technology is playing a major role in delivering education today. There is a view that by the end of year 2050, the typical presence of teacher and students in classroom will cease to exist. However, In my opinion, I agree with mentioned statement to certain extent as their will still be certain scenarios that shall remain as it is.

Firstly, the pace with which education infrastructure is growing and adapting, it can be established that societies are accepting the virtual education platform. For instance, over the duration of past decade, fifty percent of the total academic degree's are now being offered online and by the end of next decade, it will be one-hundred percent. Recent technological advancements, such as virtual laboratories, assessments through artifical intelligence, certification exams being proctored using web-cam has left presence of individuals in classroom redundant. Evidently, with all the news ways of teaching, the typical presence of the students and a teacher in school classes is questionable.

However, I believe certain scenarious between teachers and students are most-likely to remain unchanged for possibly the next three-decades. As an example, childrens will still be asked for regular home-work, assignment submission and regular examination. Failing to which, they could face same consequences. Furthermore, the most obvious problem of childrens being unattentive in classes and facing punishment would stay unchanged, even if the lectures are delivered virtually. Although there might be changes in the way childrens are punished so as to motivate them to study, but that shall not hinder the regular arguments between them.

To recapitulate, with the advancement of technology and changing behaviour of education delivery by 2050, In my opinion, certain, traditional scenarios between teachers and pupil, such as arguments, and punishments shall stay unchanged.
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Jun 9, 2020   #2
Nope. You cannot have a middle of the road response. You cannot be partly anything in this essay because you deliver conflicting opinions, which means you do not have an opinion at all. You have to choose one side to support and justify completely in the discussion. In fact, based on your discussion points, I would have to say that you strongly disagree with the given statement. That is because your second statement is the only valid statement, in relation to the given discussion. Perhaps you were unaware that your first discussion paragraph was not relevant to the teaching dynamic being discussed in the essay.

It is not about the classroom setting, it is about the teacher-student relationship. You have to make sure that you understand what the "Reason" for the discussion is, before you start developing a response. Understand what the hidden meaning is in the topic. Analyze the question. Weigh your response options. Don't just write your essay. Take the time to develop a proper response presentation. Understanding the topic and discussion format is highly important to your score.

The second point precisely points out how the classroom situation will change, but the dynamics of the typical classroom shall remain. That is the proper discussion point for this essay that you could have very well discussed over 2 reasoning paragraphs. When you write these essays, you should outline your discussion points first. Do not create an extent response, then look for reasons. Outline the reasons first and then weigh the relevance of the outline to the discussion prompt. That is how you can choose what kind of opinion to have. Base it on your stronger discussion points in order to create a proper extent essay.

This being your first attempt, I would have to say that you did a good job, even though there was a hiccup in your response. Not to worry though. As you become more familiar with the discussion formats, your writing and discussion styles should also improve. Good work. Keep writing. You can only get better from here.
OP aline90909 1 / 1  
Jun 9, 2020   #3
Thank you so much for detaled feedback.
I believe, it is opinion with word extent, Cant I partially agree or disagree?

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