will analyze this issue in the following essay.
This will be a cause of deduction points in the first paragraph. You were clearly asked to state you opinion. That makes the question a part of the prompt restatement + writer's opinion. You must tell the examiner what you think and why in the form of a thesis statement or, over 2 sentences that state your opinion and a summary of your reasoning focus.
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Incorrect plural form. An apostrophe is never used to indicate a plural form of a word. It is only used to indicate ownership, which you are not doing in this case. Errors such as these will definitely affect your GRA score in a negative way. Learn the proper way of writing plural words. That often just needs a +S or a +ES in most cases.
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Avoid the use of word fillers that do not help move the essay forward. While these help you meet the word count, it does not add substance to your writing or idea presentation.
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