learning various range of subjects is not effective
University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that students should not only focus on a major subject but also study a number of others. In my opinion, specializing in one subject is a much better choice.
There are several reasons why I would argue against learning various subjects at universities. Firstly, it leads to undergraduates' poor motivation because most of them are interested in only one or a few subjects, not all of compulsory ones. Secondly, students are affected by other subjects so that it is impossible for them to put all of their efforts into the main one. Finally, acquiring knowledge of subjects which they do not use regularly, especially in their careers, wastes a lot of time and energy. For example, my mother is a lawyer, and she admits that the understanding of algebra and trigonometry she gained is useless for her job now.
I believe that focusing on one specialist subject makes undergraduates highly experienced in it. When students do not have to learn subjects, they can spend time reading books, searching information on the Internet and conducting experiments on that subject only. If they choose to continue working in that field, these valuable lessons and experience will greatly improve school leavers' career prospects. Nowadays, employers tend to find the best worker for each position, not students acquiring a decent understanding of every area. For instance, Gennady Korotkevich is the highest-rated competitive programmer because he learnt only algorithms at his university.
In conclusion, my view is that university students should major in one subject rather than do courses in different ones.
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A thought is not the same as an argument. By definition:
Thought - a consideration or reflection
Argument - an oral disagreement; verbal opposition; contention;
Considering the meaning of the individual words, it is incorrect to frame the discussion of the opposing thought as an argument. While there is a disagreement, the use of the word "thought" in the original presentation indicates an opinion, not a verbal tussle. Make sure to use the correct synonym for the keywords so as to show a proper LR development on your part. Word meaning plays a large role in your English comprehension skills consideration and LR scoring.
The question posed is an extent essay ( I partly agree, I fully disagree) but you responded with only a personal opinion, completely ignoring the original discussion instruction and reasoning format requirement of the original prompt. You do have a clear opinion presented in the thesis sentence. However, you did not properly respond to the extent question before filling in the blanks for the reasoning thesis requirement. So you will lose points for that in the scoring process.
Since the concluding summary is less than 40 words or 2 sentences, then you will not be gaining additional points for your concluding presentation. Just additional point deductions which, when added to the other deductions you will receive as per each scoring consideration, will result in a non passing score for your test. Make sure to understand what the discussion format is and respond properly. Accurately summarize the discussion in the concluding paragraph. Avoiding these 2 major errors can help lessen the scoring deductions applied to your final score.
Something you can work on is acknowledging the other side of the coin before revealing the extent to which you agree upon. In your case, it could be: "A diverse range of subjects can definitely help students figure out their interests more clearly; however, I argue that..."
I can pinpoint several things which you definitely got right in regards to structure:
You stated your opinion in the intro, people refrain from doing that but in this question format, it is necessary.
You made it clear "to what extent" you agree with the statement by stating that the former is a "much better" choice. Too often people leave it ambiguous as to what their full opinion is, which is why I prefer not having a moderate opinion but instead; either a complete yes or no with this sort of question.
Thank you a lot!
You said that I should use the word "thought" rather than the word "argued" so I have two other questions for you.
Mr. wrote his introduction for the topic : "Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes." like this: "It is sometimes argued that high school students should be made to do some work in their local communities. In my opinion, it would be wrong to force teenagers to do any kind of unsalaried work."
He also used the word "argue" instead of "believe", and at the beginning of the second sentence, he wrote: "In my opinion, it would be wrong to ...".
Also, his conclusion is only one-sentence long and the number of words is less than 40 words. For example, he wrote: "In conclusion, my view is that goverments should spend money on services that benefit all members of society, and it is wrong to waste resources on projects that do not improve our everyday lives.", and it is good enough to get the maximum score.
What is your opinion?
@ Ahmed adobewan
Thank you a lot!
I understand your approach to the essay, but if I wrote like that, my second paragraph would have to be about "learning a range of subjects helps students figure out their interests more clearly", which is not my aim.
Thanks for your compliments!
Hi @CBQ. I'd love to discuss the sentence "it leads to undergraduates' poor motivation..."
I don't think the word "motivation" is a good choice. Actually, most of college students are required to learn a range of subjects but few of them are thus discouraged. In my opinion, "distraction" is a better choice. I'd like to write as below:
It leads to distraction. College students are forced to divert a considerable amount of time and energy to the subjects in which they are likely not interested as opposed to devoting themselves to those that they are motivated to learn.