To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money paying salaries to professors.
There is a debate about whether universities should pay more to increase professors' salaries in order to improve the education quality. Some believe that the increase in salaries can stimulate professors to focus more on their teaching. However, as far as I am concerned, it is not necessarily the case.
There is no denying that salary increase can promote professors' motivation for teaching better, at least in a short term. It is almost human nature that one will become more enthusiasm in work when receiving more money for reward. Then the passion will turn into action, improving the education performance. However, the passion, gained from the material stimulation, would pass sooner or later. In other words, the motivation will vanish/disappear before long. Furthermore, as it is impossible for universities to keep on spending money raising salaries, the quality of education would not keep improving.
In fact, there are other approaches for universities to make education quality better besides the method mentioned above. One way among them is upgrading campus facilities. As we all know, it is critical for a university to equip with many kinds of facilities, such as those in laboratory, library and gym. The college with excellent experimental equipment, say, a Quantum Computer, is more likely to receive precise results in computer science field than those without one. It is access to these high-tech facilities that enables college students to have more opportunities to learn and do research, leading to their success in the future. As the advanced apparatus require a large amount of money to achieve, it is indispensable for colleges to allocate their funds to that aspect.
Another way for colleges to enhance the quality of education is to provide financial aid for professors to learn more and improve their teaching methods. Rather than giving money to them directly, universities can use that money to train teachers. For example, schools can invite famous experts, such as Nobel Prize winners, to host a academic seminar and ask professors to attend. Also, to acquire outstanding abilities in educating, teachers with great potentials should be sponsored by the college to exchange to other universities or even study aboard. In these ways, their knowledge and teaching skills will undoubtedly be developed, and along with the process is the improvement of the teaching quality. Without such training, the professors would miss an ideal chance to grow.
In a nutshell, increasing professors' salaries is not the best solution for education to improve. Such other ways as upgrading facilities or training professors are also effective and essential, requiring universities to spend more funds.
Hi Dong Wang,
Welcome to EssayForum.. :)
I would like to focus directly on grammatical range and accuracy issues. I hope this would be helpful.
1st paragraph:
- It is argued thatThere is a debate about whether universities should ...
- SomeOthers believe that the increase in salariesraising the salary can stimulateencourage professors to (...) teaching methods .
- However, as far as I am concerned, it is not necessarily the case.(unclear position. I am sure that you need to present a relevant or clear position here. Relevant or Clear position would help you achieving a high score)
2nd paragraph:
- It is undeniable thatThere is no denying thatsalary increaseraising salary can promoteenhance professors' motivation for teaching betterto teach better than they used to be , at least in a short term.(saying this one can weaken your argument)
- It is almost human nature that(try to vary your sentence structure)Naturally, one will become...
- Then, (comma) the passion will turn into action, improving the education performance.
- In other words, the motivation will vanish/disappear(choose one of them. I rarely see people write by using this symbol) before long.
I can see that you were proposing a solution towards this issue. I think that before expressing your ideas, it is better to express your disagreement first in the introductory paragraph.
@ichanpants89
Thank you for your reply.
The main theme in the first paragraph is indeed not clear. Thank you for pointing the problem out.
I think "There is no denying that" has the same meaning as "It is undenialbe that", so is the change necessary?
@donge
It is true that the phrase that you have mentioned convey the same meaning, but if you switch them, I think that it would look stylistically better than the previous one. You need to remember that varying the sentence structure is one of the things that might help you achieving a high score in writing.
Another suggestion for you is that it is related to the title itself. When you want to write an essay with special purpose such as IELTS or TOEFL, you are suggested to mention it in the title. For example, you can just write "IELTS Task 2: Should universities..." , "TOEFL integrated essay: Should universities.." or any other types of essay that you might feel accurate.
Also, almost all essay has a prompt that tells you what to write. Mentioning the prompt would be beneficial for us in checking whether your essay has already answered the prompt or not. This would be beneficial for your future practices later on. Thus, gaining some improvements would also be easier compared with the correction that only focuses on grammatical range and accuracy.
