CollegialCollege education plays an important role onin employment opportunityopportunities these days. SuchemployersEmployers often have beenhave become increasingly interested not only skills but also knowledge. Some universities, however, often have placed the emphasis on knowledge in their own ways. This is strongly disagreed that skill acquisition is also crucial especially in detailed careers and has more job opportunities.
.... you need to improve presentation of this introduction. I suggest you to do it again.
Collegial is wrong... there is no such word. Also pay attention to punctuation.
This is strongly disagreed that skill acquisition is also crucial especially in detailed careers and has more job opportunities.
.... This sentence is very confusing and the reader cannot understand what you try to convey. Say it using direct speech. That is the best way to express your ideas clear and convincing;
I strongly disagree that ???????????? ( tell what you disagree)
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I strongly agree that ????????? (tell what you agree)