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IELTS TASK 2 : Universities provide students with the additional skills


EXPERTS, kindly need your feedback :-)

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Universities should provide students with the skills they will require in order to succeed at their future jobs.

How far do you agree or disagree with the above opinion?
What are some of the job skills that employers look for in new employees?


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Pursuing degree in university is arguably to be the best way to get better future. While many people believe that universities actually focus on the basic knowledge based on chosen major only in order to master it, I, like some others, think that such academic institution is better to offer some special course for enhancing needed skills in future workforce. This essay will support the aforementioned opinion with some reasons and suggest several job skills that high level companies look for.

It is well known that multitasking graduates are easy to find their dream job compared to the other counterpart. It should be understood that employers have a tendency to hire someone who has several expertise. It means they no need to pay many people who master one competence only. Such situation has direct link to company's outcome which needs to be limited.

Furthermore, there is some expertise that should be owned by graduates with the aim of getting job immediately. Most importantly, having studied by many scientist who concern on this matter states that the competence which contributes most to the success of reaching well-paid job is communication skill. It is because this dexterity becomes easily to be identified even before doing the main job. Secondly, it is related to computer skill realizing that most of duties have to be done by computer. Moreover, digital data which is worked in computer is easily to be distributed. Clearly, the ability to master this sophisticated technology is a must.

Ultimately, considering the need of company which tends to likely hire such skillful person, there is a great responsibility of universities and colleges either to provide additional subjects or to train their student separately in order to succeed them. And based on company's demand communication and computer skills should take into account.

It is well known that multitasking graduates are easy to find their dream job compared to the other counterpart.

It is well known that multitasking graduates easily find their dream job compared to the other counterpart.
Jun 4, 2014   #4
Furthermore, there is some expertise that should be owned by graduates with the aim of getting job immediately. Most importantly, having studied by many scientist who concern on this mattermany scientist who are concerned about this matter states that the competence which contributes mostly to the success of reaching well-paid job is communication skill. It is because this dexterity becomes easily to be identified even before doing the main job. Secondly, it is related to computer skill realizingrealized that most of the duties have to be done by computer. Moreover, digital data which is worked in computer is easily to be distributed. Clearly, the ability to master this sophisticated technology is a must.

Ultimately, considering the need of company which tends to likely hire such skillful person, there is a great responsibility of universities and colleges either to provide additional subjects or to train their student separately in order to succeed them. And based on company's demand, communication and computer skills should be taken into account.

Well, basically your mistakes fall for gramma. You need to improve quite much. Your sentences are sometimes abundant with uneccessary objectives or nouns. Try more next time :)
Jun 5, 2014   #5
Pursuing degree in university is arguably to be the best way to get better future. While many people believe that universities actually focus on the basic knowledge based on chosen major only in order to master it, I, like some others, think that such academic institution is better to offer some special course for enhancing needed skills in future workforce. This essay will support the aforementioned opinion with some reasons and suggest several job skills that high level companies look for.

... My view is that the last sentence is not really necessary as it does not provide any value addition to your essay. It is always good to conclude the introduction with a thesis statement that clearly states what view you hold on the issue.

It is well known that multitasking graduates arecouldeasyeasilyto find their dream job compared to the other counterparts.

It is well known that multitasking graduates are easy to find their dream job compared to the other counterpart. It should be understood that employers have a tendency to hire someone who has several expertise. It means they no need to pay many people who master one competence only. Such situation has direct link to company's outcome which needs to be limited.

You need to support your reasoning with specific examples too :)


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