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Universities to take students in equal number of both genders?


Ahmad sharifa 1 / -  
Jul 23, 2012   #1
University should accept equal number of male and female student in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
Some people find it difficult to support the view that universities should take students in equal number of both genders in each subject . this essay shows an argument for and an argument against.

To begin with, some people think that specify the number of boys and girls in a matter could have counter productive effect on the students . On the one hand , the boys are always more interested in some subject more than girls such as math , science , engineering , physics and so on , girl would be more interested in arts , literature , history , archaeology and so on . Therefore, this could make the subject boring for the students and make them not creative .On the other hand , putting the girls in specific subject could be not suitable for them such as subject of sport, lifting the pumps , which require strong muscles .

One of the main arguments for university should have the same number from both gender is that it will be a balance of ideas while studying because of the difference views and vision between girls and boys could lead into new idea. Furthermore, it is argued that the universities should not intervene in specify the number of students in each subject . It would be better if they let every students to choose whatever they like and therefore they become more creative and successful in this subject .

To sum up , some people support the view that universities should take students in equal number of both genders in each subject . However , in my personal view , I tend to think that it depends on the subject they want to study .

Ahmad
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April April 13 / 148 22  
Jul 23, 2012   #2
You need to state your view in the intro, whether you agree, disagree or neither. In this case, as you think the matter depends, you can say "I partly agree with the statement"

think that specify the number => think that SPECIFYING the number
the boys are always => BOYS are USUALLY (You're talking about boys and girls in general so don't use "the" before boys and girls, and I think "always" is too strong, as not all boys like those subjects)

some subject => some SUBJECTS
girl would be => My suggestion: WHILE GIRLS TEND TO BE
boring for the students => boring TO SOME students
I think it's not suitable to use "on the one hand" and "on the other hand" the way you did. These phrases are used to express opposite ideas.

difference views => DIFFERENT views
lead into new idea => lead TO new IDEAS
every students => every STUDENT

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deepakbaniya 3 / 92 2  
Jul 23, 2012   #3
Yes, like Aprilapril said, it is necessary to disclose your "agreement " or
"disagreement" in the first paragraph.
Most of the forum users disagree on taking "middle path," I mean partly agreeing and partly disagreeing.
In my opinion as well, it is better to - either agree or disagree. It makes easy not only to readers to understand the writing ,

but also to write as well.
If you are good at describing ideas, maintaining coherence; it is OK to take middle path.
If you ask me, I would say black or white instead of telling it grey.


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