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University degrees are very essential in job market and to pursue master education


deepachiniwal 1 / -  
Jan 27, 2015   #1
people attend colleges or universities for many different reason (for example new experience, career preparation, increase knowledge etc ) why do you think people attend college or university ?

From the decades, the education is considered as important thing in the life. Without proper qualification people will not get job. To achieve such qualification people will enroll into colleges or universities, they offer valuable degree certificates to build their career.

University degrees are very essential in job market and to pursue master education. There are lot of different reason for enrolling to colleges or university. In my opinion there are 3 main reasons such as to achieve career perspective , to gain new experience and to enhance the knowledge. But there are some more reasons like to improve the job position, to be specialized in particular field, to run business etc.

Firstly, career preparation is probably the primary and the most important reason to attend colleges or university. In academic year, they learn new skills that helps for career and future job and they not only learn theories but also practical aspects for their future.A university degree holder will get lot of opportunity for full time and stable job. In comparison, university degree holder have better job with better pay than others. Secondly, students will have new experience. for most of students, it is first time they are away from home and learn to get adjust to strangers, they will meet new people from different places , race, culture and start to see their life from different perspective. Lastly, students get opportunity to enhance knowledge in lot of different subjects like, technology, art, history and themselves. Having broader knowledge in any of the subjects makes man more confident.

Finally, By seeing all the reasons of attending colleges or university, it is clear that the most paramount reason is career growth. However, gaining new experience , enhancing knowledge are also prodigious reasons
ah_zafari [Contributor] 40 / 672 148  
Jan 28, 2015   #2
This essay has major problems in terms of organization. The second paragraph should be a part of the introduction, where you need to briefly talk about your own opinion and mention at least two and maximum three issues you are going to argue in the body. So, the second paragraph is not viewed as a body paragraph. In fact, your essay has two introductory paragraphs.

besides grammar errors, and the use of very simple sentences, you wrote all your ideas in one paragraph which were supposed to be stated separately. You need to give more examples as supporting sentences. Why do you think people are prepared for a job in universities? This is just an idea and you need to support the idea. Without a support the body paragraph is incomplete.

Therefore, this essay had one actual body paragraph, which is categorized as an incomplete essay.

Finally, By seeing all the reasons of attending colleges or university, it is clear that the most paramount reason is career growth. However, gaining new experience , enhancing knowledge are also prodigious reasons

This paragraph is vague too. It is not a conclusion. You need to reword the thesis first, then, provide the reader with a clincher to let him/her know that the essay has finished.

Hope u find the comments helpful.
Cheers,
Ahmad
Vns9x 102 / 236 16  
Jan 28, 2015   #3
From the decades, the education is considered as important thing in the life . the education has been considered as an important thing the life
Without a proper qualification people will not get job
University degrees are very essential in the job market
This essay unfortunately contains lots of grammatical errors. I would you like to revise your grammar especially when it comes to the,a,an.
Good luck!


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