It is not uncommon for some youngsters to give up on university education due to either their preference to work or their incapability of affording the tuition ofa higher education.
It is my view that young people should be encouraged to attend university if possible .
... you need to be specific in your opinion. If you say "if possible", then you need to explain why you say so.... Otherwise, leave it out.
The benefits that college education can yield for the young are truly overwhelming.
...strong sentence :)
I guess you are preparing for IELTS or TOEFL writing tasks. If so, I feel you better provide examples of more specific nature than general examples. These tasks call for more specific examples :)
My view is that university education is necessary to the young.
there you are... This is very straight... this is how you should have expressed your opinion in the introduction :)