Andy,
I wrote an essay on same topic, here is for you to compare and comment.
Hello, I had to move this post out of Andy's thread, because every essay is supposed to have its own thread. I left him a link to this page, though! Thanks!
Additionally, faculty can be provided training which could help them to update themselves which can help to deliver quality instruction.
This is jumbled with too much "which" ... the sentence at the end of the first para is very important. I think you repeat the same idea twice... about staying current in their fields. So, use the last sentence of the first para to give a strong thesis statement that clearly tells your position. You partially agree, but not fully, so can you express your position in a single sentence at the end of the first para?
It is a globally accepted fact that the
purpose of Education is to educate students who would be responsible to drive the society in coming years. ---- the purpose of education is a subject of much debate. I don't think any answer is globally accepted. I think this sentence is a bad idea... so, I suggest arguing in favor of an idea for the purpose of education, but do not say it is globally accepted. Be specific: should education focus on preparing students for work or should it focus on teaching them to think? Also, is it most important for a teacher to be an authority in the field or to be an expert communicator and teacher?
I like the essay! I agree with you. Take a strong stance, though, at the end of para #1.